Poem about my girl.
 

Your all that I think about, every minute, every second,
i miss you so much its not even funny, your sweet as honey,
I'd like to see you everyday till I die, miss you, kiss you,
and think about all the stuff that we write. My feelings are
unnoticable, when I look straight into your eyes,
girl, you got my hypnotized. I'm deep in love,
damn, my heart is getting a sore, from all the emotions inside
me driving me crazy, wanting to see you so badly, understand me,
wishful thinkin is what got me. The first time I saw you
I was like WOAH, look at this girl, she got a beautiful face,
big breasts and something to whirl. I like to play with you,
everytime I wake up, i start thinkin of you, when I go to sleep,
I even dream about you. During my day, you got my full attention,
waiting to see you, meet you, while another day has to go by with
me missing you. If I could I would give you the world to show how
I feel about you, it still wouldn't be enough for you. Your priceless
to me, I can't afford you. I can grab all the stars from the sky and
give them to you. I love the way you smile, the way you speak, the way
your perfume smells like watermellon, I smell it everywhere I go.
Have you ever looked at someone and felt like saying I love you ?
just for no reason, straight from your heart. thats how i felt,
You slipped and fell straight into my heart. The best time was when
we went on the top of the parking lot, it was hot that day, I know,
but when Im with you I'm always in warm mode. We went to the middle
of the parking and and suprisingly noone was there, like it was meant
to be, only me and you and the fresh cement under our heads. It was romantic,
I felt like I was in heaven. Surroundered by angels and all of them
reminded me of you. We sat and we talked, we kissed, but the worst part
was when we had to leave. The sand on my back, your lip gloss on my
lips and all I prayed for was that your parents wouldn't find out
that we kissed. We were late 2 minutes or so, but nothing felt like
us holding hands while we walked through the mall. Your dad gave me
dirty looks in the car, I looked away and looked in the sky and
thought about the next time Ill to see your beautiful eyes. When I got on the train,
I already missed you. Hilary, I love you.

Came straight from the heart. Critizim is welcome.

damn kidd dat was deep...really feelin it...came from ya heart and can tell that u meant every word of it...had a lot of emotion in that piece...keep that comin kidd...
if u get a chance hit up some of my drops...iight peace

You can't really knock this at all. It was written pretty decent and very clear. When I was reading, I got the impression you sat down and did it pretty quick. Looked like raw emotions, straight to the point, and not getting carried away with some huge ass words. Nice writing. I'm sure she loved it.

this is so emotional ,it makes me wonder about lots of things we go through ,all i have to say that this is a wonderful piece.~1~

thanks for all the positive feedback. Really appricate it