BrOTheRP.A.R.A. Vs. A.K.A.
 

i don't believe this bitch thought he could battle me. anyway lets do it

16-20 lines see how good this newb bitch is

no crew votes
no d/r votes
no hate votes!
and i want feeding cause i don't no who you are.

i think thats it but i forget alot

oh yeah no prewriting or biting

k heres mine bitch

Yer chump I kno you wanna go to the dump and find some bottles, I'll take you there leave you there, and speed away full throttle. I'll take you in hurr any day over in thurr, Fuck It's for sure. You got no balance you got no chance with a man like me built that dont tallerate no obedience. You've got no offence thats nonsense you think yer a prince just like la reistance. You remind me of a clown dont frown cuz i made you look down in yer own town i got crowned. Just fall down you mine as well, You cant ball You'll end up crawlin cuz i broke yer ankles, Just like last week with kurt angle for sure he has a small cable.

i was a liitle confused with that flow.. the whole paragraph thing is gay and you don't have enough line that i can tell neway

here mine:

trying to battle me i can't believe this fuckin cat is serious//
he don't no what he doing, he gotta be fucking delerious//
even if you were panties you still won't get in my girls pants//
a bullet will have you leaning back like the roc away dance//
you the type of dude to stock a raper to get some dick//
i only gotta spit six lines so we get this shit over wit quick//
my words cause more trouble than denis the menis//
the only way you gonna serve me is if we play tennis//
but dat'll never happen cause that ain't my game//
i'll say it "raps fucked up" but your the one to blame//
wit me around your ass is gonna get locked up like akon//
the flow will make you tipsy in the bitch like i was J-kawn//
you better not fuck wit me cause i'm the rap don//
and the only way you gonna get me to leave is if you call 9 won won//
when we done the only thing you'll be riding in is a herse//
this shit was over before you even spit your verse//

ehhh I hae to give it to aka just cuz his verse was betta

both verse was bad not so goood but bro had to much stressed wack lines so overall aka verse was better

Structure: AKA
Wacker lol: Brother
Came harder: aka
Punches: AKA
Personals: tie
vote: AKA

aka

trying to battle me i can't believe this fuckin cat is serious//
he don't no what he doing, he gotta be fucking delerious//
Pretty good Opener
even if you were panties you still won't get in my girls pants//
a bullet will have you leaning back like the roc away dance//
decent line
you the type of dude to stock a raper to get some dick//
i only gotta spit six lines so we get this shit over wit quick//
Nice punchlines
my words cause more trouble than denis the menis//
the only way you gonna serve me is if we play tennis//
decen
but dat'll never happen cause that ain't my game//
i'll say it "raps fucked up" but your the one to blame//
nice punchline
wit me around your ass is gonna get locked up like akon//
the flow will make you tipsy in the bitch like i was J-kawn//
Not bad but wasnt feelin it
you better not fuck wit me cause i'm the rap don//
and the only way you gonna get me to leave is if you call 9 won won//
Not really feelin that
when we done the only thing you'll be riding in is a herse//
this shit was over before you even spit your verse//
decent closer ..but seen better

Brotherp.A.r.a
Yer chump I kno you wanna go to the dump and find some bottles, I'll take you there leave you there, and speed away full throttle. I'll take you in hurr any day over in
decent line but seen better
thurr, Fuck It's for sure. You got no balance you got no chance with a man like me built that dont tallerate no obedience. You've got no offence thats nonsense you
not feelin it
think yer a prince just like la reistance. You remind me of a clown dont frown cuz i made you look down in yer own town i got crowned. Just fall down you mine as well,
Decent
You cant ball You'll end up crawlin cuz i broke yer ankles, Just like last week with kurt angle for sure he has a small cable.
wack

overall vote=AKA

Brother- Verse Was Not Very Well Balanced With Punches, Flow Was Good But Thats It...

AKa- Verse Wasnt Best But You Threw Punches And Had Better Structure...

Punches- Aka
Flow- Brother
Wordplay- Niether
Metaphors- Niether
Multis- Niether
Originality- Tie
Structure- Aka

Vote- Aka....
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bro ya gotta get some format structure n work on ya drops in all it was'nt a very good verse,did'nt like your simple ryme scheme,i think you need ta take a look at da tutorials"honestly"a.k.a:not your best i bet but it was good n deff enough ta take da win..no hate jus work on ya drops bro.....
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k that was onest but that one wasent as good as my other ones but i have no chance aganst him i just wanted to see if he was what he looked like but ya peace

ya my last verse was gay i made that cuz i was bored am i alowed to send make better one well i already have it made i made it just after this battle?

lets have a rematch lol if you want to set a new one up k?

ok let up this shit

and bro quit trying to make fuck excusses

and once this shit is closed if you really won to lose again we'll have a rematch

Brother-wack structure, weak punches, shitty flow, elevate, expand your vocab and use multis

AKA-pretty nice drop, nice structure and flow..good punches..dont use the //'s in your drops, very newbish, besides that a pretty good drop i liked it

V/AKA for better punches structure and flow