Jess Read It & Gimme Sum Feedbac
 

Yo I'm Jess Freestylen Wah's On My Mind So Here it Go....................



:shoot: I resite des verses lyke dey from out tha bible,
An if u got beef lil nigga u know u dead upon arrival
shot by a rifle, Plus nigga I got dat tek,
I gotta stay equip ta knoc a nigga on his bac,
Now dats a fact nigga, An now my life is di-gressin,
There's gotta be a way ta let of some of this aggression,
Man I got this crome S-N-Wession ful of passion,
Ready to knoc any nigga off as long as I'm blastin,





S-N-Wession(Smith-N-Wession)

OK.SUM FEEDBACK....

that verse looks like its for audio.
wen u write it u gotta hve a beta structure....
keep line length the same,try get the same amount of syllables in each line/bar

I resite des verses lyke dey from out tha bible,
An if u got beef lil nigga u know u dead upon arrival
shot by a rifle,Plus nigga I got dat tek,
I gotta stay equip ta knoc a nigga on his bac
now dats a fact nigga,An now my life is di-gressin,
There's gotta be a way ta let of some of this aggression,
Man I got this crome S-N-Wession ful of passion,
Ready to knoc any nigga off as long as I'm blastin

^^like that....u see it has beta flow..is easier to read.

i liked it homie, think manipulation was right about they way u drop a line but that was good, look forward to seein yah drop a track.
ayo thanx for yah ratin on mah 'ending tear' much luv dawg.

Yo Thanx all. I'll give yall sum honest feedbac when I see yell drop one too

Lmao...for minute thought that u were talkin to me (Jess...) but uhm, yea, its kool,keep dropping ur stuff!Nice...

Thanx Jess............lol I got chu.......Naw I wasn't jess callin u out