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$ Wordman $ vs D-Tain
Battle Rules: No Feeding No Crew Votes No Bitting No Swaying 10 Lines MAX!!! 3-0= K.o First to 5 Aight I ll spit First, just make sure you have yours in by Sometime Tommorow... Aight!!!!!!!... Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-31-04 at 08:36 PM Must drop verse in 2000 minutes after check in. |
$ Wordman $ has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-30-04 11:17 AM.
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D-Tain has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-30-04 11:17 AM.
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Aight Yo,
So you call the word out, ta battle D-Tain Fist Off, yah gonna Lose yah credit here like ja's Chain Bearing Rein on yah soul, You lack the Hook, like a broken candy cane Im Hot like Butane, you Colder then Mccain Devouring yah pride out of yah body, as if i Ripped yah Jugalar Vein! As you pore over this Text, You begin To Feel Useless like a Cafs's Brain, Your Self As a Boy, is Eroding Like Stuck in Acid Rain.. you'd have a better chance of Making it Big, doing a Du-o with Shania Twain... Key'd in In 5 min.. w/e.... |
like an exit wound, my verse will leave yours ripped open....
like a baby swallowin' a food token, your left chokin'... your punches wudnt hurt me, if they had on brass knuckles... the lid to your can of dopeness, is tighter than a belt buckle... my shit is fresh, $ man word $ spits shit you prolly already heard... check his battle wit Riff Raff, he Says RB not RV like he's bit the verse... your structure is weak, like a bridge in an earth quake, or twister... when i take the win, it'll be stuck on your record like a blister... comparing you to a bullet, you come out, and you gone fast.... and when we find u hours later, your still in a mans ass.... |
aight Lets get some votes in here..... UPPPin... Leave a Link, and a Honest vote will be returned....
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This was feedback posted for D-Tain
like an exit wound, my verse will leave yours ripped open....
like a baby swallowin' a food token, your left chokin'... (Not to good for an opener, and the punch aint hit hard) your punches wudnt hurt me, if they had on brass knuckles... the lid to your can of dopeness, is tighter than a belt buckle... (Getting better, punches hitting a lil harder) my shit is fresh, $ man word $ spits shit you prolly already heard... check his battle wit Riff Raff, he Says RB not RV like he's bit the verse... (Didnt understand, maybe I should check the battle with Riff Raff) your structure is weak, like a bridge in an earth quake, or twister... when i take the win, it'll be stuck on your record like a blister... (Aiight punch, hittin harder) comparing you to a bullet, you come out, and you gone fast.... and when we find u hours later, your still in a mans ass.... (Shoulda hit harder, punches need work) your punches need work.......try practicing more. |
Other than that
Punches: D-Tain Wordplay : D-Tain Multi : None Personals : D-Tain Final Vote:......................D-Tain. |
Voted For: D-Tain
better stucture more pu7nch lines i tink you just won i ripped him open |
uppin 4 votes
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Voted For: D-Tain
D-tain- "my shit is fresh, $ man word $ spits shit you prolly already heard... check his battle wit Riff Raff, he Says RB not RV like he's bit the verse...''- good personal... Verse Was Decent Struc' Was Ok.... Word- Had Some Punches, Some Were Played... Punches- Tie Personal- D-tain Flow- Wordman Wordplay- Tie Metaphors- Tie Originality- D Structure- Tie Final Vote--- D-Tain Return Favor With Honest Vote In Sigg |
Voted For: D-Tain
$ Wordman $ structure isnt very good...u started out with shorter lines, but ended with stretched ones...flow fell off quite a bit...u had a few multis...u attempted wordplay, but most of it was just wack...a few, at best, of ur punches connected...no good personals... D-Train structure is good...flow is on target...u had some nice multis...wordplay was decent...some of ur punches connected...decent personal... Overall D-Train had the better structure...the more stable flow...more multis...better wordplay...more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...D-Train gets my vote... VOTE - D-TRAIN Please return the favor with an honest vote on the first link in my sig. Thanx. |
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uppin 4 votes
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