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Depression
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uppin for some feedback
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Very.... interesting. Seems like a mix between some early Eminem emotion, and a Avril Lavigne track. No diss - just has that same desparation type feel. Work on word play a bit more and detail. Obviously you got a passion for writing a bit of poetry - just keep your head up and keep workin at this. 1
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I don't know why you couldn't of just posted it here too...my computer doesn't handle links well...but anyways, I guess thats besides that point...
I could relat to this alot...I don't care if you guys think Im psycho...but...I've been cutting myself for nearly two years now. And although I am not crazy about the poem poetically...th meaning of it was sincere and deep...I think you could of used better vocab...so give a bettr visual...have it hit harder...ya know? |
yo aint this in the text part?nuf said :nono: you niggas stop this dumb shit
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