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Leroy Lyric 08-02-04 09:14 PM

Leroy Lyric vs The Kid P-Dizzle
 
Battle Rules:

10 - 15 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

CheCcin In.


Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-02-04 at 09:44 PM

Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in.

System 08-02-04 09:14 PM

Leroy Lyric has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-04 09:14 PM.

System 08-02-04 09:30 PM

The Kid P-Dizzle has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-04 09:30 PM.

Nynth Degree 08-02-04 09:52 PM

Do not post your verse here. You must use the form in the first post

Nynth Degree 08-02-04 10:01 PM

They call me the Kid, yet my rhymes far from adolescent/
Don't be jealous of my youth 'cuz you got molested/
You tested and you failed, your chest'll get impaled/
'Cuz I'm sharp, fuck bitches while you sexin' wit' a male/
Even if hell is where you sailed you're not hot as me/
Like uncontrolled intersections, you're not stoppin' me/
But probally, if you wanted all of me, I'll stretch you out/
Like your ass in your prison cell sodomy/
It's gotta be me, I'll strip you of your title like a nudist colony/
'Cuz your raps are pussy, you dick, you can't body me/
If you callin' me, out, I got one word/
Of warning, fuck wit' Dizzle you'll get peeled like a sunburn!/

There's my shit - 12 bars, short n' sweet. What you got for me?

Leroy Lyric 08-02-04 11:14 PM

Lets Get To It.

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Burn and Bury your corpse, Accepting this, you asking to get yo ass kicked...’
Kid ‘u get smoked’ so bad I got crack heads getting ‘stoned’ from yo ashes!!
Leave your bones in baskets, Bringing ‘Blades’ to this battle like Wesley.
you ‘suck’ impulsively like ‘thirsty kids’ on a mommas nipple when she ‘Breast Feeds’
I bump you with bangers, got you lost in my text’ like you got Humped By Strangers!!
Beat you until ‘Jesus’ questioning your issue, like you were throwing Punches at Mangers!!

Lets change it up...

I’ FLIP THOUGHTS, bang brains until you leak portions and I’m eligible to GRIP QUARTS...
And you stay in ‘Deep Shit’ like You stay up peoples asses with Shovels & PITCH FORKS

I Bring The Pain, So Kid I’m Bound to ‘MISTAKE YOU BOY’...Put a SHAKE IN YOUR VOICE...
Only time you “Flames & ‘Flare(Flair) is when I label your text ‘NATURE BOY!!’. lmao!!


Finisher...

I’ll make you ‘HISTORY’, people see our battle and claim you ‘WORST THEN WRITTEN!!
Even at BIRTH YOU BITCHING!, Cause you stay ‘cut short’ like MIDGETS going through CIRCUMCISION!!

12 Bars, and it’s done...



M.U.R.K.E.D!!

Nynth Degree 08-02-04 11:37 PM

murked? yeah, right. Uppin' for votes people, don't be shy.

7*0*8* 08-02-04 11:37 PM

Voted For: Leroy Lyric

structure:KID
punches: actually none were good but KID"s was better
flow: KID
wordplay: Leroy
metas: Leroy
multis: KID
vote/KID

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

7*0*8* 08-02-04 11:38 PM

yo i voted wrong.... get da mods 2 delete my vote cuz kid took dis

EmerginMc07 08-02-04 11:39 PM

Voted For: The Kid P-Dizzle

yo dis shit was close,

structure- Kid
Vocab-Kid
Punches-tie
Flow -Lyric

D-ICED 08-03-04 06:24 AM

This was feedback posted for The Kid P-Dizzle
 
ok kid good struture and flow but you need to work on punches and disses.leroy good punches and your vocab and wordplay killed him and your ending was hot.leroy wins hands down with a better verse

Justify 08-03-04 09:09 AM

Voted For: Leroy Lyric

P-Dizzle

They call me the Kid, yet my rhymes far from adolescent
Don't be jealous of my youth 'cuz you got molested
~No punches...self glorification 5/10
You tested and you failed, your chest'll get impaled
'Cuz I'm sharp, fuck bitches while you sexin' wit' a male
~Gay concept def played 5/10
Even if hell is where you sailed you're not hot as me
Like uncontrolled intersections, you're not stoppin' me
~Self glorification, no punch 5/10
But probally, if you wanted all of me, I'll stretch you out
Like your ass in your prison cell sodomy
~Gay concept again..played 5/10
It's gotta be me, I'll strip you of your title like a nudist colony
'Cuz your raps are pussy, you dick, you can't body me
~Your only attempted punch 6/10
If you callin' me, out, I got one word
Of warning, fuck wit' Dizzle you'll get peeled like a sunburn!
~weak...no punch 5/10

Leroy

Burn and Bury your corpse, Accepting this, you asking to get yo ass kicked...’
Kid ‘u get smoked’ so bad I got crack heads getting ‘stoned’ from yo ashes!!
~Decent punch, okay wordplay 7/10
Leave your bones in baskets, Bringing ‘Blades’ to this battle like Wesley.
you ‘suck’ impulsively like ‘thirsty kids’ on a mommas nipple when she ‘Breast Feeds’
~Good punch n nice wordplay 7/10
I bump you with bangers, got you lost in my text’ like you got Humped By Strangers!!
Beat you until ‘Jesus’ questioning your issue, like you were throwing Punches at Mangers!!
~Decent, not as good as your first two bars 6.5/10
I’ FLIP THOUGHTS, bang brains until you leak portions and I’m eligible to GRIP QUARTS...
And you stay in ‘Deep Shit’ like You stay up peoples asses with Shovels & PITCH FORKS
~Okay multis...coulda been a better punch 7/10
I Bring The Pain, So Kid I’m Bound to ‘MISTAKE YOU BOY’...Put a SHAKE IN YOUR VOICE...
Only time you “Flames & ‘Flare(Flair) is when I label your text ‘NATURE BOY!!’
~Okay wordplay with a decent punch 7.5/10
I’ll make you ‘HISTORY’, people see our battle and claim you ‘WORST THEN WRITTEN!!
Even at BIRTH YOU BITCHING!, Cause you stay ‘cut short’ like MIDGETS going through CIRCUMCISION!!
~haha Nice wordplay and a good punch 8/10

The Kid P-Dizzle= 31/60
Leroy Lyric= 43/60

Vote:Leroy Lyric
Reason:Coming with harder punches, better wordplay, and good multis

Justify 08-03-04 09:11 AM

Some of you playas need to learn how to vote...need to learn what Multis are..because Kid had none lol, thinkin a d/r? ;)

Leroy Lyric 08-03-04 10:08 AM

Werd, I Aint Even Stressin Them Wack Shit, Uppin ^^

Justify 08-03-04 10:11 AM

aint even tryin to sway, but you did merk him...he'll either get a few pity votes, or a few d/r tho, thats how it always goes


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