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(Insert Poem Title Here)
Lay Lifeless but living, Breathless But breathing
Heart split n broken but helplessly beating Legs Torn from Torso, a blessed victim undressed A vexed vision of never walking but running with success Innocent by standers eyes stretch wider While a dead corpse lay on its chest behind the bright divider... So now you see the thin line between life and death? Its nothing but murder scenes surrounded with yellow Tape, and No arrests I'd rather be blind and dead to picture past existence Than to be alive and witness pitiful present incidents So you say ignorance is bliss, But since when was it blissful to be ignorant How can u be scared to death, but with living put no fear in it When life is the struggle and death is when it disappears instant So don’t speak on judgements, only on what u experienced Tongue Departures from the mouth, yet still speaking the truth Reaching the youths, holding grounds with no arms and feeling abused Counted on by peers to be the platform with cushion when all will fall Never paid the phone bill, don’t even have one but will always answer when u call I write a poem with no name so thoughts can reign on my conscience Insert Poem Title Here but fuck it to be honest since when was a poem rated on its Name rather than the content Jaws shattered from lies, its only right since u broke your promise Organs gutted inside out but with the thought of hip-hop its possible to stomach No gag reflex yet throwing up wise words to the close minds to be punished One Lazy eye, other one’s cocked back but Focused to see a straight path Amen to that, a disgrace to black he’s gotta molest a few kids to get some fame back? There's always the question of what if and why like Why do we get sleepy when we cry or What if death is what we are living and life is when we die holla with feedback...on the poem not the structure n set up..just read and feel it. |
yo that shit was real i felt it alot of it ha ha ha
you a good poet. peace ps hit up my song DO YOU and leave some feed back |
true thanx upping
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I think that best parts were the end lines and the beginning which always good to keep the reader interested. I thought you held alot of strong points in this, a good contemplation for sure. I really liked this and I like the rhyme scheme...I thought it was pretty hott..
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thank u
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nice drop
i liked it from beginning to tha end i cant think of n e titles for you but it was a pretty good peom |
.....not looking for ne body to give it a title..the title is already set "insert poem title here" lol
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^^^ o lol
u should go check out my poem and gimme some feedback its called "your pain is my pain" thanx |
upp for more feedback plz
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