BrOTheRP.A.R.A. vs Ill-Grammatix
 

Battle Rules:

6 to 20 lines 20 lines max
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Topicial battle about (A guy you chase down and kill later in yer life k)

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-04-04 at 11:05 AM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

BrOTheRP.A.R.A. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-03-04 11:11 PM.

I'll be killin you slow just to here my gun blow/
after im threw with you ill go/
to my place and wash my hands and face/
cuz there full of blood/.
my gurl wishes she could call the po/
but they probly wouldent even show/
and if she did call um up I would call her a hoe/
cuz she already screwed another man/
thats in a big clan/
and has the biggest plan/.
and then i would go to his place/
and chase him from his crib/
cuz hes got the mad lib/
just like i did to you/
you fuckin foo you aint koo/.

Ill-Grammatix has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-04 09:57 AM.

you'll never understand how bad these fucking nightmares get/
tossin and turnin for years... about a 9 year stretch/
they let him off on technicalities when trying the case/
I doubt that bitch remembers me but I remember his face/
sitting in the courtroom smiling never feeling remorse/
takes the stand and starts to lying, how he never would force/
a girl to have relations with him let alone leave her dead/
he said that rape was out the question; it was all in her head/
He claimed he saw her walking home, was nice, and offered a ride/
she woulda never got inside! that girl had too much pride/
and too much sense... his story ain't enough to convince/
me that my sister would just give her innocence to a pimp/
She lost it mentally, succeeded committing her suicide/
never got to testify... so they just let dude slide/
But now he's back around the way... I got this fag in my sights/
My Army training was a blessing... time to turn out his lights!

^^^ uppin for votes on this topical... hook us up people... we just tryna establish ourselves in here.


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Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

this one was easy bro came weak very weak ill had better punches better flow better structure punches hit harder bro's punches were weak flow was almost non-existent and sturcture wasnt good at all.

Vote goes to Ill-Grammatix

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

way better verse..flowand structure was good vocab killed the other verse this was the easiest topical win i've ever seen...nice verse you did it fairly well....bro:your verse was terrible i mean honestly did you even try or was this a gimme from da beginning...you need ta elevate on you written...n i think both of you could stop doing slashes//at the end of your sentences...it looks neater n makes the reader flow through the lines easier...

punches^^^i don't think this kid read the posted rules...chi's a dumbass^^

ya i kno im not gonna be battling anyone tell i make some bette lryics i need to improve my rhymes there to kiddesh so ya ill be letting people vote or w/e and ill just be gettin practicing my freestyle and lyrics then latter in a few months when my vioce deepins more ill be starting to record and neveer do lryic battles again some ones in a while but ya peace out!

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

flow - ill
stucture - ill
punches - ill
multies - ill
personals - neither

ill-grammatix, i vote for you because you obviously won this battle. your verse was more thought out than his with better rhymes and punchlines.. your stucture was a lot tighter than his also.. plus you had more content period, which did help, but it was mainly the punchlines and rhymes that you had, inwhich he obviously lacked.. so you get my final vote..

can you return favor with an honest vote in my thread? thank you, here is the link, peace..
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139131

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

weeell... brother para, your wack... i didnt even finish readin ya verse it was so annoying... flow n vocab was so basic

IG, nice drop, stayed on topic, flow didnt fall off... good shit brotha.. Ill hit you up some time for a battle man..

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No doubt OMB...lol... Yo Brother, P, keep practicing man. I knew what this was about but these others kats didn't. It'll take a lil time but look at the people with wins and study why and how they won. It'll click and then finally you'll start to come at kats in ya own lyrical way. One

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

Vote Ill gramatix
Ill had a lil story, and a descent flow with his verse.
I enjoyed his ....

Brother ya shit seemd like a 1986 NWA verse or sumthing, thought it was wicked wack and oldschoolish