so confused...................(true shyt i aint jus make dis up)
 

im jus anotha kid in denial frontin like my life is all good/
i got more problems in the suburbs...damn i wanna go back 2 da hood/
i dunno y the fuk we had 2 move all the bullshyt about danger/
now im suronded by drugs and my heart and minds filled wit anger/
and u cant trust none of theese kids..1 pinch and they'll snitch/
i feel backwards im sayin shyt like "i gotta scratch i cant itch"/
and now jus last week i find out 2 of my best friends been fukin/
they tell me afta 4 months and expect to be kool and act like its nuttin/
she said she didnt tell me cuz she didnt wanna "hurt my feelin"/
that stupid bitch gunna put me through years of internal healin/
a month before that my boy died in a crash because of plain misfortune/
so now i arive at his casket starin down at lifeless facial distortion/
i cant even measure in gallons all the pain and tears ive shed/
and i can feel my insides howlin cuz its like im internally dead/
and now im surronded by this bullshyt its all jus fillin my head/
it feels pretty good to get all this shyt off my chest/
cuz the next step was runnin wit a gun lots of bullets no vest/
and findin all thoose people who put me through this/
let the gun do the talkin and itll scream how the fuk could u do it/
cuz im fukin trapped i got no moves what the fuk am i supposed to do/
i hope all thoose motha fukers kno what they put me through/

what u think i need some feedback.................

sorry 2 hear about dat papi....but I'm feelin it! It was good...tryin 2 figure out da flow though!

yea the flow was pretty wack on dis 1 but it was more just to get shyt off my chest and mind then it was 2 sound good thynx for the concern though much luv..........

this was ok noting to great, but was good still non the less, u could of use a little multis or better vocab which im told to do all the time but one day i will try to but other then that this was preety good....

7.5 outta 10

thynx for the feedback need more uppin......................

fuck what them haters say and that bitch with 100 posts and no battles .that was offical good flow and wordplay on it i liked it alot dogg. :thumbup:

thynx dog much luv 2 ya 4 that.............................

i thought it was real sincere dawg thats what made it a good piece,i found it an easy read not packed fullof crap...nice job..srry bout ya boi 2 dawg i jus went through the same shit pretty much..it feels good jus ta get it off ya chest ,,,don't it??
hit this up for me if ya got time..
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i feel ya pain homie keep ya head up nigga n keep doin ya thing good drop holla back kid 1 luv peace out

yo thynx for da love 2 from all yall much respect keep ya head up.........................

its pretty tight i feel ur pain :)

i was feelin where u was comein from i've been through some similar things. That was a bumpin ass verse

That was tight... sorry bout ur boy i think it had a pretty tight flow 2 it still

Can u give me some feedback on my shit

thynx to all yall im glad 2 kno yall respectin my shyt...................................