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Caliph Vs. Big Chase
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Check In Due Sunday Verse Due Tuesday Votes Due Thursday 20 Lines Min 30 Lines Max No Crew Hate D/R Votes 3-0 TKO 4-1 KO First To 5 Votes Write To This Picture  |
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check dont get cocky youll get your feelings hurt
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In the picture i see the end
Or maybe the beggining of civilazation I see the creative and i see GODs impatience For making a world so far from perfection And so corrupt in so many diffrent deminsions I see the neglectance of those who care not of life only of death shining stars in a darkness of night From the highest heights i can hear the hark of the angels I can see as we stare at one another as strangers I can feel the anger and hatred The racism and evil thats flagrant I can almost see the placment of those in the fire A world of thives,rapist,murders and liers Or maybe im wrong and this is not the end but the beggining A world made before sinning Where living as one was part of our exisitence When man was gifted to be one with his creator for the evils of the serpent came much later Maybe the lava is the blood of creation Not the destroyer of that built by satan but something much deeper my mind is not properly placing The truth remains something unknowing maybe its no more then a volcano thats overflowing |
As I envision the impending diasaster before me
Hopeless only to tell others with a cry of warning My feet tremble as the might of the mountain stirs within I feel weak yet my heart pumps adrenaline to save my kin The fear takes hold my legs weaken but I do not stop Must make the bottom of them mountain before lava drops AS I reach the bottom two paths off the mountain in my path Left or right is the decision I must make for it can be my last...... -=.:Left:.=- Left the path of danger, rocks scorring the surface straight down Maybe the safest path on my hell trip the way back to town The mountains core trembles violently as I near the end It errupts as I fall onto many rocks All I think is saving friends My vision blurry, the pain unbearable and searing Vision turning red, but my destination is finaly nearing As I lay on the bottom of the hill, near the warning tower Use my last strentgh to hoist my broken legs with all my power My body wont obey, my last resort is ringing to warn all of doom Reach for the rope, closer than a hair and finaly hear a boom Bell rang my hope completed, my life sacrificed in the love for others My happiness came as the lava came to claim me, safe children and mothers -=.:Right:.=- As I run from my doom, the path of slavation away from death I leave behind all civilization, I couldve saved on the left As I reach my destination far away the earth quakes and breaks From my hill I can see the chaos the erruption will cause and makes Guilt spreads over me for my selfish un-godly deed of sin The pain not from the fiery pit of domm but form within watch the people die smothering in heat, houses destroyed my soul dies And now it looks upon the heartless human in which no heart presides |
both poems was really hot....both had a diff approach which made it harder to choose
big chase...ya poem was really nice...i like the "right" n "left" concept. Great story telling.. i see u put much thought into ya poem...niceely done CAliph.....ya poem simply talked about the picture....but it went deeper then just "talkin about the picture" which is why i liked ya poem so much.....u went on a whole diffrent level....and made me look at that picture in a whole diffrent way....More then just a poem on the picture...but u went deep and brought a bunch of diffrent topics which is why i think u earn my vote...for turning such a simple poem into sumthing more..... 1 |
caliph:
I Was Really Surprised By Your Verse...You Have Tons Of Potential To Become A Dope Topical Writer...I Think You Wrote This Verse Very Well...And You Used The Picture As Well As Your Emotions To Make This Verse A Good Piece...The Only Thing That Stops Your Verses From Being Great Topical Pieces Is Your Structure...Lack Of Imagery...And Explanations Of Your Surroundings Or In Other Words Your Details Are Descriptive But They Could Be Much Better Overall : 7/10 Big Chase: I Liked What You Did With Your Concept...You Created A Story In Which You Were Fighting Yourself...Which Direction To Go...So The Emotion And Depth Was Put To Use Very Well...You Grasped A Hold On This Picture And Wrote How You Felt If You Were In This Setting...Your Structure Was Good And The Imagery Was The Most Surprising Aspect In Your Verse...You Possessed A Lot Of Imagery That Depicted Emotions And Thoughts...Very Well Written Piece Overall : 8/10 Vote/ Big Chase I Really Think Caliph Would Have Won If He Used More Imagery And Made Sure His Lines Matched Up More Evenly Both Verses Were Well Written But The Things That Caliph Lacked Where The Things That Big Chase Excelled In Thats Why He Gets My Vote |
thnx uppuin.....
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well....I wasn't expecting anything from either because I never read there poetry or topicals before even though I battled Caliph recently but I was suprised...here's the breakdown for both....... Caliph: wow.... you had dope imagery and great emotion taking place in your drop...you flow was on point but I wasn't looking for just flow....I was looking mainly for the depth of it and how your imagination is working.....and you did well in mostly all the aspects you were basically describing the picture which was nice and I understood it well............. OVERALL: 7.5/10 BigChase: wow again....nothing to expect this is the first poetry type drop I ever saw you do in my life mayn....... and you impressed me alot........your flow was nice....... your imagery and storytelling were flawless.................. your imagination and depth you did was simply amazing for the depth and emotion I was looking for............... OVERALL: 8.5/10 Vote goes to: BigChase |
thnx its an honor...too bad A.I. booted me lol...........try to work it out but thnx..lol
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naw fuck that i got forsaken blacklisted he cant vote on this thats chase fucking homie dr vote and blacklisted flow take that vote off
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From Reading His Breakdown It Doesnt Look Like A D/R Or Hate But Neways Ill Take It Off And This Battle Is Closed.....Tie
--F.I |
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