livin in darkness
 

yo my rhymes come from my heart/
i'm tryna explain my time in the dark/
nigga wont let me in cuz i aint worth it/
i wont eva lose the oppurtunity to serve it/
this rap game is shit to me and dont mean nuthin to me/
yeah
what is in it for me/
its so scary that i got no real parents/
if i eva saw em i prolly knock em out/
cuz they treated me like shit and garbage/
when i cry i say that aint me/
i got a dream that no one can redeam/
yo as strange as it may seem i will neva not sing/
if it is so strange than got shit to say/
c'mon
nigga i'm not afraid to admit that i'm white/
i'll still rap even if you disagree i luv it inspite/
of the rap game killin my brutha/
i swear i'll kill the mutha who wacked ma brutha/
all i want in life is a good and bueatiful wife/

chorus x2
yo all my life i lived in darkness
i was always scared that one dAY
he might come and take my life away
the devil aint gonna get me neva
i stay wit god fo eva and eva
but i still live in hate and darkness

yo this is my new work so view it but i aint done yet.

nice, holla if ya consider a remix to promote ma new ass, go to our battler though.

yo you mean you wanna join in the song holla baq

yea we should connect on dat, i aint gonna be away for liek to days but when im back ill holla for a collab

tight i post i felt it alot wuts up wit da crew its like u n me n kizza n black majik n da prodigy eva on but neva doin nuttin now...lol....i dunno im jus halucinatin lack of sleep
lol
peep my new shit neva new it turn out dis way

i liked yo shit dawg, i felt u on it, n yea peep dat shit raw was talkin bout, ne way tite post son

sry man wernt feelin it. Alot of it didn't even rhyme and it was pretty basic, rhyme-wise and technique-wise. You had a few weak multis but that was it.

And "if i eva saw em i prolly knock em out" is from Eminem's Sing for the Moment when he talks about his dad. Elevation needed.

yo man i caqn say wut i want cuz no ones stoppin me even you niggas.
but thtanx to all wholeft feed back and that rhyme from em wasnt in mind i came up wit that i didnt steal it i wusnt even thinkin bout it.

Hey yo Ruffy-nah just playin won't be dissin on you but that was the shit!!! Well see ya on Thursday! MAYBE But ur rappin-that was da bomb!!! i know all about you so I know how you really feel, aight cuz? So peace Beyatch!!!

wut beyach yeah crazed shy

lol ok crap but you need some elevating
wordplay not too good
stucture and flow are ok

thanx for allo the feed back

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