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Avanish VS Alphabetix
Friendly crew battle, both cat's intrested in topical and are trying it out.
10-15 lines due Friday midnite. Topic is : "beef" |
I might not be able to drop today but I'll do my best.
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This is my first ever topical.I hope you like it.
Uncooked,marinated or raw, beef is the same ~thing~ In T-bone form,burgers or wrapped in a ~string~ The juicy aroma that fills the nostrils when ~cooked~ At places like The Keg,high quality food is prepared,seats must be ~booked~ With terriyaki sauce or plain BBQed,it is quite the ~experiance~ When I see it in my plate I always hope it is not ~deliriance~ Some people like it rare,but I prefer mine well ~done~ I even sometimes add montreal steak spice,to add a bit of ~fun~ At restaurants you can choose pastas,salads and pizzas,but beef is my ~choice~ I like to add sauces,which make the meat ~moist~ I put it on the fire,and wait for the time to ~come~ The seat feels hard and painful,on my bony little ~bum~ But I stay because the pain will leave, with one bite of my ~meal~ Plant the fork in, cut and eat,my wounds are sure to ~heal~ As you are reading these words,beef I am about to ~devoure~ This gift from God will not last a quarter of an ~hour~ I push away my plate and wipe my beefy ~lips~ Then I turn to and eat the golden crispy ~chips~* For pork,chicken and veal,I have a slight ~resistance~ But beef is by far my favourite,I admit it with no ~hesitance~ *-chips=fries.fries are sometimes served with steak. |
Ok kk |
As the sun set’s, vet’s beef’ with cadets
Suburb’s beef the projects over status and rep’s And the weaker uplet’s struggle for second best Even on the net, see beef battle’s in text….so what’s next. Money is livin large power is a nigga in charge to be da king Violence is da beat you drop and war is da song you sing Like meth and J king , Nas and Jay Z Dre and Eazy, or Tupac and Biggie See beef through the street’s, when jealousy creep’s Du-rag’s fill body bags, as my peep’s family weep’s. Death becomes thee, who brings envy to me, Ignorance acceptable when ya have a mouth to feed? Act right beef bring’s the beast in me to the mic I got beef Cuz of stereotypes and bitch ass socialites With people who assume they’ve seen me and my like’s See beef’s a fight, don’t believe the hype, don’t order beef….live another night. First topical battle ever, look'n to know if I should be do'n topical or not. |
Lmao...... Ok Not At The Verses, But Avanish Talking Bout Beef As In Food, Creative Though, I Say Tie Both Did Different Meanings To The Topic Beef And Was Descriptive In Areas, lol but i Say Tie,
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This was a nice drop ya both thought those out well, I like' Alpha's wordplay, I had no idea you could drop like that, it's pretty sick.
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this is getting slept on.....
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are we suppose to vote?
If So: Ava- HaHa, i loved it. i mean...when you talk about beef on RV, you think of whos dishin hate to who. but Not When ava hits the block. i liked how you focused beef, as not an antitype. where there was only one meaning to it, instead of the usual two meanings to a word or punch. but the topical had to many commas, just run on sentences. nice work, but throw some word play in there, and add some stuct...not bad for you first topical... eh? alpha- you used beef like most of the rest of RV would have, which in this case isnt good. b/c now ava's beat you in creativity, but you had nice wordplay and struct. which ava was lacking, but i didnt like your opening..or some of the filler lines. you had a good over look, you didnt get into a story type scenary. which i found good, b/c no one wants to here some made up refelction on beef. but you stayed vague and thats a strong point with your verse. hard desicion. conclusion- for the wild style of creativity and inovatism, ill give my vote to the topical rookie= ava Congrats. |
Alright 1-1 let's get some more vote on this everyone
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