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check this shit out:

Listen now I can stop you boomer/1
You act like yer gangsta that makes me laugh up in humor/.2
You think you’se the greatest balla/3
but all as you do is wine and complain that you got no dalla/.4
But I don’t cuz I roll my doe it makes all the gurls glow/5
And they like how I roll cuz I go with the flow/.6
Listen boi you got no beef your so heat/7
You cant even rhyme to the good beat/.8
I would never make lyrics with you, you cheat/9
You think you live in the street, you think you’se so sweet/.10
Stop thinking yer the one whose gonna call me on/11
Your fate is long you will remember me like Im spawn/.12
After dawn I take you down wit my hardcore rhymes/13
Yer down I hit you to the ground and you get up later in time/.14
You think you was fine all as I tell you yer rhymes are lame/15
You got no fame its you that is to blame/.16

umm honestly dog and its no hate....
this was weak, simple, lame plus to basic to make....
get more creative.... drop a few punches or multis or toss some personals in the air or something....
this was a terrible read.....

3-10 keep trying thou...

its better then what boomer makes but ya i kno its suck ive made better tho lol but im relay better at making songs i can add like shit in it to make it sound good

Yo Dawg Leave A Link To Were You Replied Before...... In Someones Elses Open Mic Or This Will Be Closed.