"the evils" -rate it-
 

I'm affected by the demons of money, greed, and lust/
But I gotta escape them, victory is a must/
If I make the demons my goal my destiny is eternal flames/
I made a deal with God, I even signed my name/
that I would do no evil, that I would never change/
He gave us freewill and I chose the rugged path/
where countless failures walked and minds were molded into wrath/
The evil looked so good so I chose it without hesitation/
Since the genesis it lived within creation/
Tempting us with things beyond our imagination/
It affects our whole community and even our own nation/
Murderers walk among us but they chose to kill/
It's the evil that affects them, controlling their freewill/
Although I walk through the dirt my steps are guided/
and no matter how dark this path gets I lighted/
I'm not ashamed of the trials I've endured since birth/
I'm blessed not cursed because the trails made me stronger/
So when the evils tempt me I can endure them longer....the evils ya'll

that was good man but the last 5 lines were wack you should fix them up ight
flow 7/10
vocab6/10
storyline 7/10
overall 7/10 good peice fix the last 5 lines there wack

thanx man, really appreciate some real feedback
i just joined this shit like a day ago, its pretty tight
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