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bigchase vs fluidmoon
Battle Rules:
10- UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting EXPLAINED VOTES ONLY TOPIC:RAPE Minimum posts to vote: 150 Check in by: 08-17-04 at 01:05 AM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. BigChase lost due to missing the deadline. Fluidmoon disagreed with reopening the battle: http://community.rapverse.com/showp...5&postcount=620 |
fluidmoon has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-16-04 07:06 PM.
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BigChase has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-16-04 09:09 PM.
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She was "the one", my pure angel i admired from afar,
Exchanged hello's,enthralled by beauty,she was on my radar, Overcome by intenstiy each time i saw her,had to hold her, Her body so perfect and smile bright like the sun,i remember, Overcome with lust,yearning for her warm immaculate body, Young, supple skin,silky blonde hair, a queen she embodied, I had to have her then and i know she pined for me too, Could tell by her wild wanting stare,her body language true, See my mind was obsessed, i dreamt of this girl constantly, Couldn't control my urges,had to act,nothing could stop me, Pulse rate high,sexual energy surgin through my body, I cornered her behind the conerstore in the alley,oh sally, Her curves, her eyes, her lips so smooth,drove me wild, What a high she gave me didnt care that i was a fool, She kicked,punched, cried and screamed and tried to bite, But little did she know,i was enjoying the rough fight, Even though i sit,rotting now in a cell, i feel her everyhwere, She will be mine again when i'm out, in her, again, together. |
Rape the ultimate violation of trust and love, act of hate
an ultimate sin, destroying body, mind, betrayal can create .:The Rape:. The cold night air carried the noise of the nightclub waited for 2 hours no sight of her, just pimps and thugs Then I spotted her, oh the culmination of beauty and body HAd to find a way to seperate her from the rest of the party From my position in the alley, I yelled for help, my leg broken She ran to help but I grabbed her from behind and she started choking My skin against hers, how soft and smooth it felt on my hands She was gaged, but beautiful as ever, as I wispered Im her man Bent her over, she cried silently as I took it out and sighed back and forth, oh the culmination of sensation, grunting as she cried she tried to struggle move, but i just hit her to the ground she tried to get away so I stomped her, and restarted without a sound As I near the end her pain is my climax, my moan shows the end as well I throw her to the blood soaked ground, shes nothin but an empty shell She shook violently, as I slowly kissed her goodbye Left her to die silently violated, bleeding, lonely, and crying .:8 months later:. As I entered the gates my fear reached its ultimate heigth SCared to close one of my eyelids to sleep at night but morning came and later was found out the crime i had done the others decided to take justice into there own hands wit fun so everynight as I lay in my cell I pray to god for a way to escape but now I know hes turned his back, now im the one whose raped |
i did this long itme ago actually the hour before the battle was lcosed...so lets go
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This was feedback posted for fluidmoon
that nigga fluid has rapist tendencys lol hide all the little white girls hes around lmao
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wtf? i had this closed son.............damn, you dont do shit fairly at all........CLOSE this
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Voted For: BigChase
no hate on this battle, chase took it...both had nice flow but i was feelin chase's more chase-started out coo, told us bout rape, then straight into it, fully explaining each little detail.(i like that)...kept doing his thang in the middle of the floor with nice wordplay and structure(more like a rhyming story) good shit...ended the rape into full detail again, and told us that he got caught, without making it predictable(and didnt come out and say "i was locked up for it)...good shit, enhance your vocab...OKAY ending(couldve been better) fluidmoon-nice flow all around...started out slow, but picked it up near the middle to the end...didnt detail the rape too good, but still did yo thang. some lines had choppy rhyming, but it wasnt predictable, and it was creative...umm, you ending was better, OKAY detail thoughout the entire flow... overall- both had nice flows(FLMOON): work on entrance next time, and fix up rhyming words(CHASE): work on making better rhyming words, they started to get boring near the end...yall did yall thang, had nice wordplay, and structure...keep doing this shit drop votes on the below battles |
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why u wunna close this and waist a battle? |
im not....she wanted too but forget it..............
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i already requested it cus you never listened to me, but whatever man, you got your way, you had more time, thats all...........good luck in your new site
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Voted For: BigChase
I must say this was very good. Its a good topic to think about I have wrote a few poems and short stories on the subject myself. Big props to both writers for sharing their thoughts on this topic first off. I think both were very well on point with the way it flowed and how well the structure was. You both made it very easy for the reader to consume. At first glance I must say I give an edge to bigchase because he comes with the story, then 8 months later as well. You know at the end of every story everyone wants to know what happens later, or how things come out, so thats a plus. Over all both were very nice, I just thought that gave bigchase a small edge. V/BigChase Please return the favor below thanks. http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=143655 |
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Thanks good addtidtude thats hwy youll always get far..... :thumbup: no I didnt have more time I had the same ammount as you it only took 15 minutes anywayz... |
no you didnt, you lie, tell everyone how you pm'd strobe after i won this battle, tell them how you checked in, agreed to the rules and then lost because you didnt post your verse on time, let these voters know that you're a liar, and you cried about it,even though you had a week to post, I HAD 15 MINUTES, you had A WEEK,D/R king, everyone knows it too, and i will expose you, good luck
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