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..::ingenius mind::.. vs Empire
Battle Rules:
UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topical=write about prison or being locked up Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-20-04 at 10:36 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
..::iNgEnIuS mInD::.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-17-04 10:39 PM.
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Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-17-04 10:41 PM.
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Dont floss you might get ripped for ya chain
Pop off fuck waiting for shift change You soft you know how they do fags Sodimize and tie you up with ya doo-rag No fair ones you getting hit with the rachet Beat down and lift for ya package Fucked in the shower And you bout to parole in a couple of hours Its real hard as a coward Waste of strenghth hitting them weights We got icepicks and razors in electrical tape Dont be stressing them calls Poking ya chest out will get you killed in the messhall Wether big or small we alldealing with time And half the population still dealing with crime Thers homos,thugs and plenty of ganstas Plenty of anger and thats why theres plenty of bangas Plenty of bars Cantops if you aint got money for gemstars Muslims and Gods gangs is overly active And drugs get flipped more then gymnastics No mail no package Extortions the deal Cuz it was real since the first day you came here |
This was one of the most depressive times of my life... My soul felt alone and restless n my mind wasn't rite... I wonder wut my parents would say now im in this place... To them im a discrace and I can't bare to see my face... I just hate it, this unusuall feeling I just can't explain it... It feels like mah heart got smashed into the pavement... But its worst, inside its empty as everything just left... Now I want to reverse time, cuz i live a life full of regret... Why does dis have to happen now and happen like dis... After what happend, by everyone I won't ever be missed... For a person like me, there can't ever be a happy ending!!! because i had a straight road to life n now its jst bending... No ones on my side nemore so right now im very lonely.. I lost mah dad to the war, and now nones gonna hold me... Im young n still growing, n got noone to help n show me... 2 live a good life, and now my soul is dying very slowly... It's already too late, since for nothin i've been sentenced... 60 years in jail, so living 4 me rite now is jst senceless... dis pic is the closes i have 2 home since im stuck for a century.. The only family I have is thru this one picture dat was sent to me.. No body's going to remember me so there's no use of livin.. I should start gettin use to dis since mah life iz in dis prison.. |
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This was feedback posted for ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
merk fest! empire you sucked fat booty cheeks in topical anyone can write about that aspect to it. what u need to do in topicals is put a lot of imagery, something u didnt do. i mind that was sick and i felt like i knew that person for the longest wit all that imagery and depth in ur verse. if anyone votes against you they should be hung.
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This was feedback posted for ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
she got u beat empire and also
wasnt u reppin yo crew so your weak and yo crew got its first lost by Low Ryders Inc. |
ahahahahahahahahaha
u got wooped hahahahahaha so stop posting in our forum |
damn guys..dont go too hard on dis guy!!! Hey where's my 200 u have to give me??? lol
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This was feedback posted for ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
uppin
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1 her shit is whacked it sounds like a fucking poem 2 stop freeposting in this thread i already told strobe your wasting threads and nobody can see what you say assholes freeposting will get you banned uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppin
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how iz mine wack?????lmao...lets change that bet to 700 now dat i saw urs...lol.. u shouldn't back out since u think mines wack..lmao
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Voted For: Empire
real nice flow and u stayed on the topic a lot better u explained jail a lot better in ur verse Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
Ok this was a decent battle Ingenoius........good imagery, and vocab was pretty good, flow was great and structure was on point throuhout..good storyline as well, I could picture your situation through your words...good drop Empire.....your magery was poor you didn't let story develop you jumped right into the middle of the story instead of opening and then getting into the experiences of a convict which is what hurt you in this battle....your flow was a lil off as well as ya structure...gotta elevate Vote: Ingenious |
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