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G:Deuce vs L.I.
Made a newer one cause the other one was messing up
Crew Battle L.I.(CS) vs G Deuce (PSA) Topical Battle! 20-30 lines Topic:Regret or Regretting No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-22-04 at 07:41 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
G:Deuce has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-04 07:45 PM.
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.:Regret:.
Armageddon has released itself upon the vulnerable souls of the world. Tongues of men capture lies like innocent blood on a sword. Signs of war, show signs of times we think we might expect, but our expectations are low, because our conscience are filled with the thorns of regret. Lyrically possessed? Only when we are filled with words that stand subside. Drugs imposed instead of using our brain to reach our high. Cursed by those, who regret the sins that binds them with chains of shame. They try to be themselves, but can’t speak the essence behind their name. So why do we cry? To release pain that others have made into daily rehearsals. We speak of freedom, but when’s the last time we seen a “Jesus Saves” commercial. Being truthful is the only anti-drug of regret, but people shrug, when interracial couples stand and ask for respect. Color is skin deep, but sin comes from our greatest adversary. Sugar-coated poison that kill thoughts and leads two men to marry. But if God made who we are, and how we are supposed to be, then why do we regret being alive, and misusing the gift to breath. Clearly it seems that our end draws near with whirlwinds of flurry. To deliver this unexpected end to this real-life horror story. Showing that there’s more than meets the eye, revealing all the portions of closet space. Out of the closet shows Evil’s grin and every design of hate. Then regretting we will be, since there won’t be nothing else to hide. Realizing that we had unlimited chances that ended at the stop of time. |
L.I. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-04 08:35 PM.
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Strive for perfection and when failure hits it's tragic...
But we try to prevent such flaws with certain gadgets... Creating alias after alias.. cheating their way to fame... Deep down they subside the ultimate feeling of shame... With nothing earned by skill.. they strive harder to cheat... Week by week.. their concious puts a burden on their feet... They still force themselves onward until almost being caught... Begin to have doubts of their ways.. new ideas are sought... Discover a dark track of paths emcees refer to as biting... Disgust within themselves like why bother writing?... Hide the truth behind the walls.. slowly though they're caving in... They struggle to find line after line.. but still are craving wins... Taking on the best with their own lines.. not flipped but word for word... Till they ran their luck too far.. worst case scenario occured... Caught red handed.. a whole spit was vivid and details exact... Stunned at losing the war.. and didnt know how to react... Their concious predicted it all before but it was fought back... The reget was a building process.. now its fully stacked... Banned and got no true respect from it.. member of the past.. Broken down by the truth and they were disembled at last... Regret was inevitable.. the road of shame makes it worse... Took nothing from it and now permanantly dispersed... |
uppin for votes................................tight drop L.I., one of the best battles I've had so far...................
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uppin..
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uppin for explained votes.....................................fa sho
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This was feedback posted for L.I.
guud battle..... uppin for yall
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uppin mo fo....
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Voted For: L.I.
ooooo lcose lcose lcose batle G-hot verse fiya man........nice verse nice potential tlkaed obut America and its problems....very good piece bro fix ya structure though try to keep ya lines thes same length but I never do.... L.I.-hot verse........is this obut a RV person that bit your lyrics lol.....nice imagery which is hwy ima have to give to L.i only cuz he built up supsension/ included many modern story elements in thurr pz rturn the fav wit ohnest votes on my battle wit Fluid.... |
uppin..... thanks for votes.....
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uppin for some honest votes ya heard............................................
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uppin for some more votes............................................. .........
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Voted For: G:Deuce
too many lines to do this line by line.. but nice topic regret.. and before i critique this both drops were really, really good... good job.. hope nobody sleeps on this.. okay critiquin'.. ~opener: Strive for perfection and when failure hits it's tragic... But we try to prevent such flaws with certain gadgets... Creating alias after alias.. cheating their way to fame... Deep down they subside the ultimate feeling of shame... ^very nice L.I. u took that category, nice.. ~closing: Showing that there’s more than meets the eye, revealing all the portions of closet space. Out of the closet shows Evil’s grin and every design of hate. Then regretting we will be, since there won’t be nothing else to hide. Realizing that we had unlimited chances that ended at the stop of time. ^very good way to end ur topic with time being a factor.. really nice.. ~Image-wise: G:Duece, produced a good focus but still stickin' to the topic regret.. the "Jesus Saves" commercial was very creative.. ~Word-Usage: G:Duece again.. the way u used ur words was really nice and feel into play with the topic very well.. "gift of breath", "whirlwinds of flurry".. very intelligent.. nice.. L.I. was very good too; i liked the way you produces lil' segments of multis, for example: Discover a dark track of paths emcees refer to as biting... Disgust within themselves like why bother writing?... Hide the truth behind the walls.. slowly though they're caving in... They struggle to find line after line.. but still are craving wins... ^last two lines, very creative and stickin' to ur version of regret relatin' to emcees.. It was a very hard decision for me, honestly but.. the use of words was a good effect for G:Duece which gave him the win, no hate towards L.I. cuz ur shit was tight too... ~L F~ hit my links up, ppl hope i can see a rematch or sumthin' between u two.. so that's word.. good luck with this.! ---*+~1~+*--- |
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