Smile Is A Upside Down Frown
 

hav u ever wanted to kill sumone for the shit they start
u can't get it out of ur head, not even out of of heart
it like if they could jus keep there mouth shut
they start to stare so u look and say ''WHAT''
it's amazing how 1 person can mak ur life hell
but when people ask me how i am i smile and say swell
people act like they don't care what people say
but behind peoples back they cry inside evryday
u hurt inside but theres a smile on ur face
u see sum1 popular and wish u could take there place
seein then with there better life
a whole family sister, brother, husband, and wife
it not like my life is the worest, it not that bad
itz jus really fucked up i don't have a real dad
so remeber before u bring sumone down
they might have on a smile but insides its a frown

wow, well,i liked it , a little intense but its good, i like how you put emotion into your things, the last line i think you could do alot wit well the last two lines
"so remember before u bring sumone down
they might have on a smile but insides its a frown"

that you could play off of alot , not as strong as i would have liked to see it vocab wise, but again it was the emotion that comes through when you read it
nice keep em comin

K i like all that u do.. this was good keep the stuff comin.. well i g2g i'll c ya later