i'M THE PUNCHLINE KING
 

Even as a teacher you couldn’t be a creature with knowledge
Your feature is garbage so why seek leisure in college?

Not clever and firm you’ll never learn to rhyme
Rhymes not true bloom why you assume you can rap?
Stand and yap junk you crap punk, say what you sees land on map?

Can’t navigate ship or elevate in script you float a boat
With no hope that’s sinking and stinking like a Titanic joke

You pretend you ill but your blend don’t kill whack trend
don’t fill hope you spill dope like and addict you lack dividends
you appear false clear across the globe where your black river end?

Hinder success please surrender don’t impress even with a blender
Couldn’t mix best, couldn’t fix a nest of bees with honey and its tender

not the best punches i've seen but there not bad....

we should have a punch-line battle.....

but decent...

its aight dawg elavate `

to be honest thos are wack punches ive got better and ive seen better but yer flow was better: (no hate)
flow: 6/10
punches: 3/10 elavate
metphores:1/10
vocab: 6/10
overall man i got no clue (no hate)

punches are weak...seriously...and your structure looks kinda messed...usually cats have one style of writing multis and yours was a mess...to be honest looked like you just robbed some lines and threw them all together...whatever tho....

kings always get dethroned...

thanks for the critique and feedback yall

well man sense you've been on this site sense june man you arent that good you should be better you need to elavate bad

BrOTheRP.A.R.A. show me where I need to elevate thanks for responding doe

do you know what doe is use the word in a porper sentece or dont use it but go elavate fuck i dont kno ask someone

BrOTheRP.A.R.A. thanks for responding but don't pay attention to others read and interpret what you see and right now you see vicious punch lines dawg HA! HA! HA!

ok then hoe cake

come on man these punchlines is knocking bitches out dawg

i aint gone lie they nice, BUT they aint the best shit i ever herd

Epademik thanks for the props for real dawg these other cats wanna start something up in here up in here dawg