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All I Can Stand
That's All I Can Stand... I Can't Stands No More
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- IP: EFDF 488F Yo... this is a real sensitive topic to me... If any of y'all was growing up and going through shyt like this than I know that you'll feel this drop... this is real life shyt that me and my lil sis went through when we was younger... so... here goes.... Word up... throw ya hands up I had enough of the rough stuff Times is ruthless... I'm toothless... Beat me? hell naw!... nigga, never again my mind's filled with anger; the pain is settin' in Tears drop my eyes; I'm surprised... I sit and cry thinking 'bout the days... I wore shades... to hide the lies I hate that ass with a passion, the body bashings are at a standstill; I'm ready for some action I can't forgive or forget the pain I've sustained... the memories are stuck in my brain 10 years old another "mister"... in the family... who beat my momz in front of my little sister What could I do? I couldn't hold my own... I'm trapped in a zone ... of broken hearts and broken bones and broken dreams; sometimes I wanna scream... the nightmares; envisioning my home as a murder scene... All we had to do was leave him... how many reasons were needed? a thousand beatings for every season sleepin with the enemy; ya can't win for losing... a limb or ya life... will it ever end? That's all I can stand... I can't stands no more (repeat 2x's) The pressure... the pressure... I'm ready for a war! Now I'm feeling kinda leary... my body's weary I'm wondering if this niggaz gonna spare me He's drunk again... stumblin... mumblin takes a swing... I'm on the run again but now there's no one here to save me... he's going crazy my only chance is to be "Swayze"... then maybe I can get some help; call a friend or a neighbor maybe send a prayer ...to my savior Oh my Lord, Oh my God, Goodness graciuos gimme the strength and the power to face this agony... why does he batter me? stays mad at me? I need some form of strategy! my finger's on the trigga... now I'm the bigga... nigga... coming to get ya so nigga sit ya black ass down... take one last look around... Wussup now?... you either swim or ya drown... I choose to abuse the fool who abused me... bruised me... i'm threatening his life with an uzi.. colder ...than i've ever been...cuz I'm older I told ya... that I owed ya... so now it's over! *gun shots* Everything was true except the last 2 bars... but it is exactly how i felt... and if i coulda got a hold of a gun... ya prolly wouldn't be reading this right now!... one **also posted in Poetic Scriptures** |
nice shit, dope word play, but some lines lacked some better choices. The flow was pretty flawless, without noticable cracks in it. Over all about 9/10
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well i read yer shit fast now just to let you kno im better then you now lol well then that song but anway heres the feedback: flow pretty good 6/10 wordplay 5/10 overall 6/10 ok drop
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LMAO @BRO... THIS SHYT IS LIKE 10 YEARS OLD!!!... this was meant to be audio... only a real emcee would be able to catch the flow...it's really not that hard... and the wordplay was left out intentionally.... it's a straight-forward piece and I was writing what I felt at the time... this joint just flowed from me without a lot of pausing and shyt... i knew in my mind what i wanted to say and i wrote it down...
LX... good looking out on the fedback... just thought i'd show another side of me... battles are getting boring so i decided to drop some of my more serious stuff until kats start bringing the fire again... again... 10 years old on this piece... imagine what i would do now... hey bro..lol..you'd never beat me on any day...lol... keep writing though... ya are a little better than when we first met up...lol...one |
yo thats dope mayun nice wordplay i felt it good stuff......
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thx, yo! uppin 4 more feedback on this joint...holla
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i liked it, it was straightforward and strong, some deep shit to have happened 10 years ago, damn, sorry about that,but writing about it helps....nice drop
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uppin for more feedback on this old piece i dropped
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