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DV8 08-26-04 02:49 AM

Regretful Sins (((Topical)))
 
REGRETFUL SINS TOPICAL

SELF REFLECTION
Ungodly acts constantly surround me, my life is an injustice like government tax,
I can’t shake these feelings or relax, I must change refrain from my unholy tracks,
Nothing beautiful about my past but I’ll switch from sin so I can ”cross” gods path,
My own words are beginnin to overwealm me n in this instance I might fail this task,


MY MEMORIES
My mind replays thoughts of the first time I wish I gazed into ya eyes ”jus once more”
My soul cries, unbenounced 2 you my dedication, for you I would lay done n die for,
My reco-lection of that day is burned into my memory n never gets fuzzy or faded,
My heart is loveless just waiting for the day my love be reunited for my life n traded,


REGRETFUL SIN
Remember…. how anctious we was ta see each other that first day that I returned?
We Both grew up and moved on but wanted to express all that we had now learned,
Ya wrote a hundred and some pages about our life…….. before I even left that year,
Were u Scared that id forget about U?, im sure that was your greatest of all ya fears,
Shared tears and borrowed shoulders 2 cry on when we both needed a honest friend,
But your voice has left n your body barried, and now I still feel like this is the end,
I know we didn’t talk much lately…but I wish you were here cause I miss your touch,
Abandoned this earth,rose above the stars..i now know I should’ve told you so much
Not knowing if it was lust or love but ecstacy nonthe less was prodominately evident
Unconditional caring, n innocencents that enchanted all these now are very relevant,
I now believe this is my punishment for my wrong doings n trespassin against others,
Biblical or logically I now know this..say what you say don’t delay were all brothers,
I wish you were here to read this……”KAREN”………..that’s truly my only regretful sin,
Cause when you died so did I, cursed to carry a body which the soul has died within,



Ice Pick 08-26-04 12:16 PM

This Was Dope

Good Flowin And Good Content

Peice Of Month No

But A Runner Up Yes

BlackMagik 08-26-04 01:01 PM

dope piece, but the structue to me was hella hard to follow...nice content tho...I liked it...I dont think it would be a piece of the month tho...kep droppin tho dawg you'll get in there

~1~

DV8 08-26-04 06:40 PM

thanks for the feedback.............uppin this once again..........................

G_$peed 08-26-04 06:52 PM

it was tight but no...
runner up hell yeah...

DV8 08-27-04 04:45 PM

uppin for feedback leave a name or link n ill get back ta ya n drop some feedback......

.:youmom:. 08-27-04 07:51 PM

yo nice drop enough said peace i like it man 9/10

.:youmom:. 08-27-04 07:51 PM

just keep it up your fuckin dope man!!!

DV8 08-27-04 08:13 PM

thanx for the feedback ya'll n ill keep droppin but i would'nt mind a topical vets opinion on this...where can i improve on it...ect.....

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