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DRAG~ON vs Poet
Battle Rules: Crew battle: A.I (Poet) vs. PSA (DRAG~ON) 10 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit Votes TOPIC: Drug Addiction G'Luck... Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-30-04 at 01:44 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
DRAG~ON has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-27-04 08:16 PM.
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stuck in a world wit out water spent my last dime
drugs prices is raising is all dats on my mind need more money need mo weed need mo crack speed balls it calls relapse one track dats all lights off job calls kuz i don't work no mo on da corner suckin dick 4 a hit of good shit ballistic a life time of it time move in slow mo down 2 ground zero robbin liqours stores wit a icepick losin my mind waking up in cold sweats is basic an every day thing ima pheen fuck fantasys...... man i have dope dreams screamin 4 candy cane fast lane 2 dark halls da smell of foot an ass.... shit all over da walls do it matter hell naw kuz i get my buzz on sweet dreams of my deeds how my only clothes got torn left my house n home ......man i cant be seen like diss distress unrest considering being threw wit it but it continues 2 call my name rapidly running back 2 it do i do it diss addiction is deadly but i wont see da affects hair falling out teeth rotten now ima nervous wreck my neck itches 4 no reason at all eyes continue 2 fall bags so big wit it but i can continue 2 bawl my success continues 2 crawl into a pit of dispare in smokey rooms flare up da pipe i don't continue 2 care |
Poet has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-28-04 08:49 PM.
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Topic: Drug Addiction Presence of Substance Pure Extasy, through my system.. Ballistic blood pressure.. Dominates my every move.. Not a care in the world, Loud acustic music Expressing thoughts with nuthing to prove.. Im lost in a mood.. This sexed up state, Metaphoricaly like some Friendly Fore play.. Hypnotic in every way..Decaying my mind Tranced on a chemical called..M-D-M-A.. You could say.. Im relying on science.. Defyance to those who.. claim Im Suicidal.. But shit dude, if thats true.. Then fuck it, my shout for pills at my wake recital.. I dont care for life.. Tunnel vision releasing deamons from deep inside my mentals.. Forming stencils or guidelines to life, more deadly then Poisoning from lead pencils.. Its all good when im up.. Fucked off my guts n could care less what the rest thinks.. Emphasising my point or thesis.. I need this.....Minus Jaw locks and forced blinks.. Regret Its unexplainable.. Depression fills my thoughts with questions relating to my Actions.. What happened? Im only seeing last night in captions....Cuz I only remember fractions.. Foreseeing aftermath re-actions.. Back and forth having dillusional hypotheticals.. Fear of rejection from close friends, Is it real? or just an Illusion... Misconceptual.. Pain is exceptional, how one ruined night can be so fucking destructive on reputations.. Im demonstating my ignorance because I got urges to pop again, n fuck the Stipulations.. I swear its honing me in.. Watching me spin as I fiend for another.. stimulated feeling.. Fuck quitting this shit.. Im stressed with no friends n the end of the week is nearing.. Whats my life become? Im hearing rumors thats humorous, People are naming me a junky.. This shit cant be true.. Then its hits me.. Im a jobless, drug fucked, highschool flunky.. Suicidal Depression Fuck it, Im relying on this shit .. Still attemting to quit, jus Trying but im weak.. This addiction got me thinking of dying in my nightly routine of.. Crying in my sleep.. My opinion of life? Its worthless, only I know the pain, when nobody takes you serious.. If anybodys actually hearing this? Call 911, Im confused n my thought patterns delerious.. I got a knife in my right hand.. Dousing my life in ice to numb the pain of reality.. Ever seen the excorcist? Well check this, My life's metaphor is a.. valid Simmularity.. Im an imperfect person, addiction kills self esteem, Forgetting what teachers said to me.. Admittingly stupid, and now im suicidal.. Slicing the vein holding my life's integrity.. Who'll care when Im long gone? I got nuthin left but fake friends with other clients.. I used to have a life.. But it was lost, due to my rebelious image and sociatal defiance.. |
Voted For: Poet
Poet: Word... Fuckin... like... wtf? vocab is through the roof, then ya got flow down... Herbs gon say that shits stretched, but audio cats will know its nice.. Good plot, word to emotion... nice morals n shit............ word.... DRAG: hmmm... flow was kinda basic... and plot was VERY predictable... except that suckin dick for a living thing... that was kinda... wierd... stay up though |
Voted For: Poet
Very dope batttle tought i'd wanna vote on this looks good Poet: damn, you got the good wordplay i couls see the scenery of your verses nice structure nice flow also i liked how you lined each event up nice shit man you really evated Drag~on: yours wasn't all good but it was iight you did ok i couldn't image yours as much as poets but its better than what i could match in a topical battle ( i suck at topicals) but good shit Vote is: Poet |
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Voted For: Poet
this was a one sided battle poet took this in every topic....good battle from both....but my vote goes to poet.....nice structure bro |
Voted For: Poet
aight this was a gud topic .....for this crew battle.......anyways.....i poet gots my vote.... Dragon...this is like the first i seen ur verse without those "quotations"...u need to work on ur flow....some of it seems off to me.....ur wordplay still seems so simple....work on that....u need to werk on ur stucture it will help out ur flow....other than that str8 verse....gud luck wit ur battle |
uppin to finish this...............................
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Voted For: Poet
well both good pieces but i havta give it ta poet he came with much more content in his verse n sectioned it off well n it was a good read with alot of feeling n much more complex vocab....drag~on you had some really nice stuff to but your verse dropped off in the end n your vocab needed ta be a bit more complex.....i think both could elevate on your ending ta make the topic more of an impact....imagery was good on both sides but overall i was jus feeling this one more.... |
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