i need some input on this first verse...
 

verse 1
walkin in the middle of a death trap of sand
the lies and all the shit just pilin up in my hands
when all of a sudden shit gets outta control
i trip over my words and stumble into a hole
its like quick sand, it just keeps pullin me under
when i try to get out, it makes me wonder
is this life even worth it? is it just a big trip?
then i struggle a bit more and then fuckin slip.

its tight the rhymin...