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Mentalz vs MixTape
.::MixTape(UE) Vs. Mental(CS)::.
This Crew Battle Has The Stipulation That The Crew Who Loses Has To Delete Their Forum and Can Never Reunite Their Crew. ::..Rules..:: 15 Lines Minimum 26 Lines Maximum 5 Votes Wins No Crew No Hate No D/R No Biting, Recycling Topic: Suicidal Contemplation ~R~ [/CENTER][/FONT] Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 09-01-04 at 12:10 AM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
MIXTAPE has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-29-04 09:38 PM.
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Mentalz has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-30-04 04:23 PM.
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damn this shits crazy
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static brain waves suicide they contemplate this 9mm weigh's very heavy on my fate as i put tha gun to my head...flashes of life start in rotation pictures of my childhood now theirs...... *hesitation* my whole entire life starts to flash before my eyez my open casket momma leanin over percistintley cries as tha picture fades and i come back to reality if i pull tha trigga i'll be anutha statistic...anutha young fatality but why do i want to live for all this suffering and pain its to late now they'll put me in a instatution an diagnose me insaine now i feel some sweat start to form on my........hands my life is like god forgot to make any.........plans i'm just a youth in a downward spiral on this planet earth born premature its like they been tryin to kill me since birth my prophicies were all complete like bein imprisoned but this suicide i'm about to perform i did not vision? but now me and only me i find myself at a crossroads through out life ive been crossed by friends and foe's but enough with tha talk my head's about to get caroted i put tha gun to my head click........tha shit wasnt loaded? |
And as the moon screams, and the light weens.. This young mans dreams erupt into a fight scene And as the night cries to distract eye's.. His hand lets loose as three or more knives fly But he cant sway at all or let his mind fade Needs to consentrate to lower the crime rate So he snaps back to set traps on track's back As he maintains process and prepares & acts glad Infact he's sad but would never admit it at all Just as soon walk himself right through a solid wall Percistance and chance swell to dance in romance As he catches the train's prance in one quick glance And as the smoke crests and all the billows smolder His heart grows colder cos' he knows its all over Rage fills and spills on hills crimson with blood As he remembers the thrills from kills soiled in mud Snapping back to reality the formality all dies As the rumbling train echo's in night's dark sky.. Rolling over nearly consumed by the freights weight He escapes fate & waits till he's filled w/ straight hate His murderous methods beckon the very second.. Electricity's tweekin his brain waves.. He might be insane and deranged.. But he still remains, cold and unchanged. |
Uppin' the battle. 105 Views 0 replies.
stop sleepin. |
static brain waves suicide they contemplate this 9mm weigh's very heavy on my fate as i put tha gun to my head...flashes of life start in rotation pictures of my childhood now theirs...... *hesitation* my whole entire life starts to flash before my eyez my open casket momma leanin over percistintley cries as tha picture fades and i come back to reality if i pull tha trigga i'll be anutha statistic...anutha young fatality but why do i want to live for all this suffering and pain its to late now they'll put me in a instatution an diagnose me insaine now i feel some sweat start to form on my........hands my life is like god forgot to make any.........plans i'm just a youth in a downward spiral on this planet earth born premature its like they been tryin to kill me since birth my prophicies were all complete like bein imprisoned but this suicide i'm about to perform i did not vision? but now me and only me i find myself at a crossroads through out life ive been crossed by friends and foe's but enough with tha talk my head's about to get caroted i put tha gun to my head click........tha shit wasnt loaded? |
Voted For: MIXTAPE
Damn this was a good battle to read...both came real hard in their topic...both had a nice structure and flow to their verses easily readable i enjoyed both equally and i think u both will go far in the topical scene...Virtue i'm going with you purely because i felt you were more on point and at the end of the day...that's whats most important in these types of battles...Mentalz u came good don't get me wrong but the multies approach in this case was wrong in my opinion due to i felt you went a lil off point in places...other than that i'd say u were both pretty much equal on every other topic...nice battle keep doin shit like this it was real enjoyable |
This was feedback posted for Mentalz
Just wanted to say tight battle to the both of you......but especially to Mentalz :evilgrin:
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Thanks for the feedback, my drop didnt get off point on any one line, look close and you'll understand the story. Thats ok though, nice vote, keep um' commin' :)
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Voted For: MIXTAPE
Alrite, I enjoyed both.. But Virtue got the battle won mainly for more content in his lines and an easier to follow storyline. Vocab- Virtue Emotion- Virtue Multies- Mentalz Readability- Virtue Enjoyed- Both.. Vote- Virtue But dude, you gotta change that font and color, thats hard as hell to read.. |
Uppin for simplicities sake.
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This was feedback posted for Mentalz
gud battle.....stay up both of u..................
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uppin'.
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