World's Struggle (Not Just Ur NOTOPIC Freestyle)
 

aight so here we some from the hart shit

wut the fuck did this world come to
u can see KKK in Compton just walkin through
u can see all tha racism tha hatin, no love
u see some one kill a man for nothin, and then ask from above
the wars, the drama, the terrorism, head trauma
when they see u sellin drugs they blame it on ur momma
like she couldnt raise a son workin two shifts a day
cuz when i had a beoken leg we could afford to take an XRAY
they never think that all their promises to help the poor
never live out cuz all the money goin out on war
cuz when they say improve the life, they say yeah we will help you presonaly
and nothin happes cuz iraq "supposably" got nuclear weaponry
we got them conflicts and all why, cuz we think we the greatest country
thats why we fuck around with others, instead of teachin people out of county
they give us guns spin army commercials on tv each day
but to say kids stay in school, dont sell drugs, it aint the right way
its to hard for them they to involed in all dat shit of preparin us
to at some point yank us out of school, when war is on and be sendin us
to battle fronts to die cuz they all thin we are most powerfull
but when i hear that i just they ur just fuckin full (OF SHIT)
Cuz how the fuck are u gonna keep a steady country rules
when we only liberate them countries who have oil, or jewels (etc.)
i dont care if u need that fuckin oil or shit
i just care that ma litle bro got shot wit a 9mm gat
so when u gonna get to improvin neighbourhoods
and help the people to stop sellin dope and find their roots
the only way i can provide is sellin dope, and im in trouble wit the government?
IM LOVIN IT, how full of shit this country is and we still live in it

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uppin

this piece was coo man some deep shit kinda like the peice i read earlier from someone below this thread
flow was kinda off sometimes cuz of typos sometimes cuz of your rhyme scheme
you should try some multis it'll help your flow out
you had some good thoughts like the army&school shit very true
then some ones that could have been more thought out and expressed in a more meaningful way
although the piece was pretty simple you had some good shit in here nice drop man

thanks man i know i need elevation uppin

nice...it tells how the world has almost comes to an end... sayin this has happen and this wont cooperate.

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agight uppin

uppin

common ppl reply on this shit cuz this aint ur gay net beef thread this shit is real

i guess thats why we all like this, we walk by a real subject freestyle, and read gay net beef threads, instead of talkin bout sumthin relevant to all, wed rather see two people who dont know each other, and will never know each other tryin to diss each other? that why this country is so fucked up. UPPIN

nice drop homie...

^^^wutever i said earlier

This is some good shit man.....nice drop

see dog thats what you need to do another good one speak from the heart dog and your dope

aight uppin