Jus Freein' feedbac would be nice
 

No more procrastination, this time I rock the nation,
I see your depression, now prepare for inflation,
Mann peep tha situation, its havoc corruption,
you bustas should have straightened up, but now its self-destruction,
these lessons Im learnin' will keep my body from burnin'
And this aint bout bling bling or finacial earnins,
this love in my heart will shine bright like a star,
and just because Im local, dont mean I cant go far,
but you must know any betta, becuz you playa hate so cleva,
you lemons reach my level not ni-zow not neva,
Grandma say Im ludicrous she say Im full of foolishness,
Im lazy, and crazy but I wont lose points of coolness,
I'm more macho than Savage and livin so lavish,
the cream of the cri-zop this rap game I grab it,
comin' so tragic, take measures so drastic,
tha victor of each battle, until I reach my casket.

MANN!

not bad...elevate some more homie

How about this... You put this in open mic... CLOSED.