yo check this out please wat do u all think
 

:laugh2: home is were the heart is
i promise u that,
thats the reason i protect my family
to keep them intact,

i want interact with them
forever i got their back,
they can depend on me
im ready to counteract,
to any situation that
involves a bat,

yo enemys fly away cos when
i strike ul relapses,
u mess with ma family again
a plane i wont hesitate to highjack
and aim it at ur sack
hear this plane go spalt
against ur BALLs
there's no way u could DODGE that
i made a pact with my family
il never look back
im protecter and keeper and ur
a victim of an other terrorist attack.

work on your spelling and keepin all the lines the same width

I like the concept of the song. You started the first lines off nice...then towards the end you kinda went away from what you were talking about. You said something about a plane into somebody's balls. You could have left that line out. Next time stop and think abit more about how to make your lines better then what you got. But other then that your going to keep movin up. Keep the rappin up and you'll see.