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VIRTUE vs ILLegitimate
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TOPIC~GREED 50 LINES MAX No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 09-04-04 at 04:10 AM Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in. |
ILLegitimate has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-04 01:10 AM.
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VIRTUE has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-04 01:10 AM.
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TOPIC~GREED greed is what makes close friends turn suspicous and u are blinded by greed cause it prevails your wishes i'm gonna tell you a story about two friends that use to be close hit tha lotto went out to celebrate and it was over after tha toast when i won tha lotto it felt like i was on a str8 money high but when i looked at my friend i could see tha greed an envee in his eye he wanted what i had frontin on the outside like he was glad but on the inside he was griven in agny he was just mad that night we went out to a club to celebrate called tha red cliff he was kinda shy i told him to lighten up u catch my drift we was haven a good time dancen relaxin on girls mackin that night would prove fatal by tha 45 he was packin i thought nuthin of it hopped in tha car sped away from tha bar from that last drink my driving skills were a lil below par it was 4:45 i could almost see tha sun we would be home in 1 (min) then he said pull over i said why? and then he showed me tha gun i said whats that for? he said thats rite i'm robbin your ass blind and if u resist i'll have to leave you stuck in this lifetime it was 4:49 i made a quick thrust for tha handle 4 shots rang out my body dismantled i run for tha woods and he said "dont run i got this situation handled" rite then i knew their was an acommplice more than one but before i bailed out tha car i grabed my 44 magnum handgun their i was runnin out in tha woods best friend gonna kill me ova my goods headache comen on like i was just hit in tha head wit a dozen car hoods internal bleeding was comen so i stoped at a brook to check my wounds it felt like tha bullets were pushin out tha skin like babies out wooms i took 1 in tha leg and 2 in tha back i think 1 hit me in tha lungs cause if your lungs fill up with air you can consider your self done i heard footsteps so i started to run feel down lost my gun morning is here moisture on tha trees from tha morning sun rite then i heard a boom knew it was a shot and felt tha penatration turned around saw his smirking face shot with out hesitation his head like a tiny grape exploded in a unbeliveabal pop then i saw his body just fall back and lifelessly drop i couldnt move cause tha last bullet grazed my spinal cord i didnt want my 3 year old daughter to see me at tha morge tha goverment puts out this money to shelter and feed but it becomes more than tha essientials and that brings greed in this world we need less of these followers and more to lead i did tha best i could shelterd and educated my productive seed i hope my daughter spawns a whole other caring breed cause here comes tha body bag and theirs no more blood to bleed |
what is it that breaks families apart?
its greed motherfucker cause you got a black heart it changes everything, your entire life you cant agree on anything, it starts trouble and strife but the world is filled with it and everybody knows its streches from millionares, to the streets with hos and im bewildered at how you can find it everywhere its even in 5 year olds cause they refuse to share the rappers do it, why do you think they resisit to do concerts to the priests in church cause the *little boys* convert greed can be found in every way shape and form cause one minute thier your best friend and the next they transform you cant trust anybody anymore cause theyll jstu lie but greed extends to everyone no matter how hard you try cause everyone wants somthing and youll do anything ot get it you can steal a dudes joint even after he jsut lit it cause your addicted you can stop yourself buying somthing at the store is greed within itself cause you know taht you need it it to move on and now taht dont believe your greedy, your jsut withdrawn you dont need anything extra to help you suceed you only think that cause your life is controled by greed |
wow i told you taht you were hardly newb.... haha
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Voted For: VIRTUE
VIRTUE...its too long to break down as usual but yours told a story like if it didnt rhyme it still would have been a tight story...a little of the forced rhyming but not bad it was some good shit...ha way too long but ill let it slide illegitimate...your rhyming was mad forced which gets on my nerves...nothing terrible but it didnt really do it for me... v/VIRTUE |
Voted For: VIRTUE
This battle was pretty even with the emotion in the verses.. Though skillwise topically, i think that virtue definatly took it.. Structure- Virt Emotion- both Vocab- Virt Enjoyed- Virt Vote- Virtue.. |
Voted For: VIRTUE
Virtue definitely won his verse was real discriptive n had me hook wit da flow nice drop real good shit vocab was sik 2 Ill ya shit was good but coulda been better if u had more vocab n a story 2 get a lil more complexity but good drop dough nice battle give a honest vote 2 da battles in my sig i voted on ya battle |
Voted For: VIRTUE
Virtue won cuz he was more into it and his vocabulary was bbetta and his structure was good etc an ok battle but virtue got this one |
Voted For: VIRTUE
Decent battle.....Virt..you really overdid it on this one, great imagery throughout very well developed piece here, flow was good throughout, story developed great, good all round drop Ill.....good piece too, your structure wasn't very good tho and flow was ok coulda been better, vocab coulda been stronger, but story was good and imagery was ah'ight but not enuff in this battle Vote: virt |
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