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For$aken vs Empire
P.S.A. Tourney
Empire (seed #8-PSA) vs. For$aken (seed #9-AI) Battle Rules: 10 - 15 No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 09-07-04 at 11:10 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
For$akeN has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-05-04 12:24 AM.
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he probably got a lot of liposuction...his shit hangs out like lil kim this foo's ugly......even his picture frame is runnning away from him new conspiracy i pray to god that its true Caliph will take a last breath his telephone or remote...is sticking out like it wants to poke him to death commit suicide you take up the majority of your picture..your fat debut he sees the "green" everyday but maybe he's "blind" look to the left of you full of lard did you get kidnapped that would explain the "abduction" you fat fuck please do us a favour and get us yourself a weight reduction your trash kid...garbage goes in the bin, and you steal rhymes like tin your pic reveals the truth a handicap.....thanks to your extra chins.... you don't stack the scrilla...because this kid goes and shops at PAY-LESS he wants you to know tha answer...but he has no money he's "poor to guess" working on me what the hizzo you a homo or something sorry but i'm not gay he makes attempts to murk me...but his whackness in neverending like a ray bar 6: his blinds are green=money:) |
Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-05-04 12:34 AM.
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Need 'elevation' you been 'FORSAKEN' when talent was manifested
Verbal weopons 'pressing' my 'suggestion' that you run for the exit No 'limping' but you can tell im 'pimping' watch what i do to this whore 'Manhandle ya' 'damage ya' you from 'canada'?...aint no rappers in 204(1) What it 'meant to me' you know my 'alter identitys' you damn groupie Cant 'stand' you not a 'man' got to sneak into R-rated movies(2) Not in lyrical 'fitness' you couldnt be 'lifted' if you wrote on blunt papers Ya'll get a 'loss' you the 'force'? watch as i son you like DARTH VADER(3) Dumb hater need 'links' cant 'think' of a decent punchline Lay the pimpslap on 'hos' its bout to be '5-0' like one time(4) EXPLANATIONS- 1)204 is his area code aint no rappers from no 204 2)hes only fourteen he aint no man he cant even get into r-rated movies yet 3)in STAR WARS luke skywalker is the FORCE and but in last episode he finds out DARTH VADER is his father 4)5-0 represents the votes and one time is police but so aint 5-0 a little wordplay |
Voted For: For$akeN
Nice Spit:thumbup: Empire u dumbass u say no rappers in 204... lol im from 204.... lopts of people here are from 204... |
oops... supposed to be feedback... ill PM strobe
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This was feedback posted for Empire
Just check'n things out.. .
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This was feedback posted for For$akeN
gud battle ppl stay up.....o i think forsaken edged this.....anyways nice battle
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Voted For: Empire
Uh, Okay.... LMAO @ THE PICTURE An The Personal Side Of FORSAKENS Verse... But....................... EMPIRE Had Better Wordplays, Metas, Punches An Structure... Forsaken Ya Personal Side Of The Rhyme Was Nice But Ya Need'a Step Ya Game Up, Elevate Ya Vocab n Punches... EMPIRE Got My Vote |
Voted For: For$akeN
heres the break down opener:forsaken punches:forsaken flow:both structure:empire wordplay:none meta's:empire personals:forsaken(killed him in that) humor:forsaken closer:forsaken overall:Forsaken no hate just fact........ |
Voted For: For$akeN
forsaken- lol funny verse the opener is funny but i think thats a fuse box the blind line was nice to but i still think u should get more wordplay in your verses bunch of personals in this battle though funny 1s to others where kinda weak like the phone i didnt like to much overall though a pretty nice verse just dissin his pic empire- vocab started off good then u kinda went away from it personals where average u had a lot of internal rhymes though that kept a tight flow but i think ya punchs lacked here your wordplay was ight didnt have much of it again u should add that to your verse more u had less lines to spit an i still dont think u had that good of averse and u even fed off his when u put that link line in there your closer could have been nice but worded wrong overall work on wordplay and wording your punchs to hit harder everything else is ight vote forsaken for an overall better verse no hate an return an HONEST FUCKIN VOTE |
you are so dumb i cant feed i cant see forsakens verse stupid in the new system i knew the lame would do that anyways uppppppppppppppppin 2 hater votes for forsaken 2 of my enemys :cussing:
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This was feedback posted for For$akeN
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just feedback Empire had too much explination but yah i gotta say you have been improving by a lil( want a rematch??) Forsaken gets this battle in my eyes seeing he had a better and stronger verse with better punches and personals |
NVM take this feedback away and allow me to vote
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