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Quik-Spit

Livin on My own/
The projects my home/
Running the streets/
Bitches starten up beef/
Come after me? Ha/
You don't know where I be/
You can't find me - I find you/
Banging a Gang - Backed by my Crew/
Get the G's - up and the Ganstas togetha/
When we come 4 u its like stormy weatha/
On the 1s and 2s you think Im jus playen/
Listen Bitch - To What I'm sayen/
You aint no hard thug/
Fo sho aint no blood/
Last thang yo hear bang/
Last thing you see a tag - Reppen my gang/

I know I know, It nees same lengthish lines and flow. What can I say, This was my first freestyle. Just thought I'd post it.

The link I replied too:

How will it Change By: Realistik
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=145332

ummmm........

positive:

you had aight flow that was steady and not all choppy.............
it was straight but it needs work in some categories.................

negative:

as you said lengthen up your lines that is needed but not much..
punches and vocabulary should be expanded quite a bit............

after that its pretty good:)