Pain
 

With the cuttin silver rain I can feel the pain in my viens
I'm kneelin down prayin waitin for a change
Time awaistin keep my head up time for chasing
No more breakin for now on it's nothin but takin
In my eyes I see nothin but lying
Lil children cryin because they parents dyin
One life the pigs tryin to take mines
behind da lines with a nine in my face
get ready to dye my blood splats like mace
now I end up in my grave dead sleepin forever
in my enternal bed love ones left to mourn
how long will they gone on without the love from
they boy

This was a short emotional drop, work on spelling and structure a bit, but other then that, leaves me with some questions though,because it seems the content was changing a bit every line, the topic would shift, i'm not sure if you were upset and just wanted to drop something quick, or what, but i liked it for a first poem, well i'm considering its your first since your new here, but try to stay on topic as well too, but keep it up!!!!