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~IiL PrOpHeT~ 09-14-04 10:49 PM

Must Read From Da Poet Fictional Peace
 
Confusing Questions With No Answers Bein Mentioned
Peace Bein Deceased Reason For Stress And Tension
Keepin Our Children Guessin, Whats Right And Wrong
We're Simply Carressin, The Sin That Consumes Us All
Why Dont We Learn Our Lesson Before We Are All Gone?
Why Do We Wait, Until It's Too Late And So Proned To Stall
Just Siezing Peace, Relieving Grief, But Realisticly
The Fact Is That, We Should Forget It, The Results Are Brief
Quests For Less Tests Of Hate Would Be Great Just To Get Blessed
Nevertheless We Stress, Our Community's Got People Puttin Holes In Innocent Chests... Government Swears Its Best... To Leave Em Alone... Dont Wanna Be Bothered...
I'd Love To Follow A Thug Home Just To Meet His Mother And Father
World Bein Cursed By Hatrid And Rage Bein Staged
Caged In Racism Lacing Together Hate And Fate
Descrimination And Hatrid Claiming Domination To Nations
Evil Indications, Fake Friendships Ending In Tragic Relations
Temptations To Procrastinate Will Decide Our Occupations
Patience And Hardwork Results In Success Innovations
Too Many Lives Bein Taken, Too Many Hearts Are Racin
Tastin, Smellin, Hatrid Causin Body Chalk Tracins
Thinkin We Too Mature To Learn From This Horrid Type Lifestyle
I Dont Care How Old You Are, You're Still Just An Innocent Child
Mildly Understanding Reasons For This Type Of Piece
Honest Truth Spoken Of Real Yet Fictional Peace

YO DROP SOME FEEDBACK

~PEACE~

INFALLIBLE 09-15-04 09:39 AM

yo son nice drop, keep at it cuzzin, and u MIGHT can do somethin with this "rapshit". j/k but foreal keep on writin. aight -1-

~IiL PrOpHeT~ 09-15-04 03:26 PM

aight danx uppin damn uppin for more feedback

~IiL PrOpHeT~ 09-15-04 03:33 PM

uppin for more feedback uppin

SenesIzIt 09-15-04 04:49 PM

that last line was the best line of the piece to me "truth and then fictional peace"

~IiL PrOpHeT~ 09-15-04 05:46 PM

^^^^^^^^^^ danx mayne but can u write a lil more about my open mic verse

yo uppin for more feedback

Implicit 09-18-04 02:43 PM

i liked the topic. i liked ur vocab and ur sturucture. it was pretty deep man. it was real not like these other pieces cats put out about killin someone. this was pretty good. i give it a 8.5/10

~IiL PrOpHeT~ 09-18-04 03:00 PM

o aight fo sho danks uppin for more feedback mayne

Keith Moon 09-18-04 03:45 PM

nice dorp./....pretty good................bleh....the subject and direction you went in though has been told so many times so you get a 6/10 sorry...


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