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~Footprints In The Sand~
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Hopefully Yall Like It ~1~ Feed Back Please Ayo I clutch the gothic gift slautering wit sovergn hits torch a metropolis spittin rockets out my esopahgus~1 Deep in that mosh pit that grunge rock shit spittin verse breakin bones knockin eyes from sockets~1 Mic Prophet Spittin divine logic choppin mcees down to size of a shire hobbit~2 bathe in inequities blood lusts for 3nity inhaling infinity exhaling stars an galaxies Spittin a constellation scars and lacerations defacing the faces of past persidents of this nation I see sex~murder~lies an videotape lived in the ghetto communities they plunder and rape Vampires suckin the life I know what's at stake but I aint blaming the white man for the state of my race Cause I see code in the matrix has no color or face I'm causing a Cataclysm Spittin ghetto euphemisms lyrics wit more bars than a government prison War scars of street afflictions from pharmaceutical perscriptions droppin death suspended like slavery lynching Meticulous diction wit stigmata affliction renacting jesus acension for the peoples repenteance Hook i was carried by the footprints of sand taught the number of man design to conquer over woman or man on water or land on 7 continents my mental providence iz excellent walks in egypt to spittin a pestilance My mic apparatus wit knives attatched to decapitate bastards raising tha heads of the weak to screams of masses Practicing Nazi torture tactics combined wit arabic laws stashin ya head in freezers in plastic President started tha war wit arabics remaing a catalyst blaming 911 on tha terrorists left us forsaken in flames like hindu pessimists but I bare witness like I jus saw jehovash nakedness Merciless orator viscious wit metaphors snatchin ya ruggers blowin medulas into ya fukin jaw Leavin pieces of brain matter stuck in ya teeth I got cats feelin the kid like a pedophile priest An I stay Prayin facing the east but not islamic I rip heart sellin em to tha Chambers of commerce Word is my bond I'll break ya neck before breakin my promise at apocalypse pushin the pope out in front of the comets Writtin scripts in armanic sacrilige to force tha masses to revert from spritual savages tha bane of ruin packin more pounds than tha thighs of rubin but if i studdar it's to mutter tha pain consuming ya body after dyin at tha hands of this summa cum laude lungs guages like jamacians grippin tha pump wit tha shotty |
Can i Get Some Feedback Please
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Any fEed back
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wow, great flow and vocab in this one, and your rhyming skills are evident as well, nice job on this foreal, i liked the hook too, it really tied it all together, good job, keep droppin.....pc
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Thanks Dawg Much Respect
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can i Get Some MOre Feed Please
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...I Wasnt Really Feelin It, But Nice Vocab...
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Thanks For The Feed Any MOre?
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Im Tellin Ya'll Something Right Now... This Man Has Got Vocab On Lock And The Structure Was Sloppy But Nothing Else Was...It Flowed Right Off The Tongue Definately One Of The Best Topical Writers On This Site Without Question. You Should Work On Making Sure Each Bar Rhymes But Besides That And The Structure This Open Mic Was Damn Near Flawless...Much Skill Depth And Emotion Put Into This... I Dont Even Post On This Site No More But I Had To Come Back To Critique This Piece.. Much Respect Keep Em' Coming ~!1!~
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Thanks For The Good Feeback Dawg
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