Evil Uprise
 

yea yea dawg y getting better jus work on the things I told u too an you'll be fine.

...yo thankz bugz apreciate you helpin me propz....

whoa. Don't like the beat at all man. It's a mad hype sample (Jay used this) and the beat is slow - so it contradicts. Not really feeling the spoken word style either. Needs MAD more emotion. I see where you going with this track, and it's got potential, but not feeling much of anything off it right now. And turn ya vocals up a touch.

ps - reply to other threads - I got no problem closing threads - na'mean. be easy
-Phenom

word....thanks for tha feedback dawg tryin to get betta new at this uppin....

Spoken style is old...lol But u elevatin keep on droppin na'mean. Quality is blah!!...like mine..lol lyrics were good scream...feel the beat more connect wit it.....u kno emotions.

...word thankz dv alwayz open for advise...

word..thanks fa tha feed

i agree w/ most...you rode the beat pretty decent especially in the beginning..turn it up a lil and add some emotion you'll be there

I'll be the only honest an blunt one besides Phenom...
It was wack....
The beat...was annoyin as hell. And you have no emotion.

Work on it. -1

Just add more feeling and emotion into your presence. Your topic and how you presented was coo, but you made it seem that you didn't want to do it in the tone of your voice. Just keep at man, you'll get it.

na i gotta diagree.. spoken word style is not old.. its just a aquired tatse.. actually, spoken word is way less common than the other styles so it would be less old than what everone else is tryna do or does... this track has potential.. keep doin it

word emotions and mic prescence... concentrate on gettin comfortable with some headphones on and a beat... record freestyles- record shit you wrote a month ago whatever, just get more comfortable on a mic.

word thanks everyone i'm gettin betta an carson it wasnt that bad lol....