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Poet vs the_crazy_one
Battle Rules: 10 - 30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit 100 Posts to vote. Topic: "Psychology of a Lunatic" Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 09-26-04 at 12:58 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Poet has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-24-04 06:31 AM.
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Topic: "Psychology Of A Lunatic" A Young Mind Corrupted Growing up with pain, young with an intelligent brain.. Looking at the rich, Knowing Ill never be the same.. It did me over when I was young, fucked with my head.. Left school early every day, Started smokin weed instead.. I got a run down home and a father that beats me nightly.. This predicament I live in, constantly frightens me.. And getting ran through with drugs dont help the situation.. The stipulations of my struggle makes my mind impatient.. Not the mention Im hearing voices soon as I close my eyes.. Like my ego is shattered.. Every night I hear its cries.. Lying in a dark room Urges sweeping my mental mindstate.. Deconstructing my sanity.. Conversting with myself, knife, classical music and my vanity.. They tell me to kill myself.. I stare at my veins for hours.. Skitzophrenia's hurting me.. With psychotic controling powers.. Switch on the TV, but concentration Im constantly lacking.. Scourge of the gods, Im scorned what are the odds im packing.. Matter a fact, I shudder at thoughts of most human interaction.. Trouble talking to peers.. Fearing my minds only working a fraction.. I need to take action, Im hurting my family wont understand.. I sit at night with a knife staring at the wrists below my hand.. The Lunatic Fringe I could scream.. But I require permission from my masters.. Gods voice in my head, realer then any these mortal bastards.. Im never trapped within, Statistical religion of the system.. Named the one omniciant being, chosen by gods grace and wisdom.. Im a sarcafice.. Yes.. My eyes have no fear their full of fire.. Upon death Ill be king of Valhala, big as the viking empire.. I reign supreme, realities a dream, I now begin my entitlment.. Slit my wrists drain my blood.. Begin my un-stressful retirement.. A bleak mindscape, relating to off beat clocks tickin toc tic.. Living dark lifestyles, Im just the man next door.. A lunatic.. |
the_crazy_one has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-24-04 11:43 AM.
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Psychology of a Lunatic
for all my life ive been a lunatic but ive never thought about my Psychology standerds cause i always live by the way of the Knives and guns but now im tryin to change my ways of life but know all i do is fight either on the mic or the cpu ive never ever seen the real world from anyones point of view cause I’m crazy never lazy and always totin a gun and similar to Eminem cuz I Don’t give a fuck and i just never will give a fuck sorry poet i know it sucks but im havin a bad day |
Voted For: Poet
yo the crazy one that shit was fuckin wack rhyme fuck wit fuck is hella wack kid no vocab structure was off no imaginary your verse didnt capture me poet that shit was tight as normal but you still cant beat me lmfao your vocab was on lockdown structure was good imaginary was good overall your verse was off tha chain i was feelin it thats why vote goes to poet..... |
thats ok i know that hes going to win anyways i had a bad day and i really didnt feel this topic
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Uppin again.. Finish this..........................
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Voted For: Poet
yo C1 you the 1st topical battler to do less then 16 lines :) laced emotion and feeling I don't count structure no more but you NEEd emotion and imagary for topicals and Poet beat me b4 so you gotta come hard with him Poet ur shit as nice imagary was 7/10 for me flow was nice as always *I have*cough* better flow*cough lol though you win unanomously in ever categorey peace |
Voted For: Poet
lol...poet u won dis easlily.. even the crazy one knows i don't have to explain.. your shyt was very good poet... this is the first time i've read ur work.and to me..this is the best one i've read in a while other then vango's battle against triple n... good job.. vote poet |
I felt I came pretty weak on this.. I have better battles but I wrote this in about 20 minutes..
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lol wow...your even better then i tought then!!!! now i really wanna battle you...but come to think of it..you'll kill me...lol.. so u still wanna battle??!!!!
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Voted For: Poet
One sided... Poet had good structure, good use of vocab, and (like always) great imagery. Crazy, your drop was pretty weak. No offense, but you should practice before you come at one of the big dogs on the topical shit. Your drop needed greater length, 'cuz everyone knows you can't win a topical against Poet in like 11 lines. No hate, good shit Poet, I'ma have to throw down wit'chu topically one of these days... Vote - Poet |
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