|
"Shoulder Weight"-Senario feat. ProVerse
Topic:Too much pressure Senario's Verse: i'm telling u to trust me i got plenty of shoulder weight my problems follow me around like a president's motorcade the past year was tragic had me stressing all the time dividing my life with lines as if i were a dollar sign i know that everybody goes through pain and grief but for some people it's hard to find but mine was plain to see tragic's sent some shockwaves through my life causing a change in me cops come to my house over a murder case and almost start blaming me but it's ashame to be only 18 and lost the equivalent of a whole family a kid, a fiance', and now a father, i can't even hide the fact that now i'm bothered i need jesus give me some holy water, never went church but believe in the holy father i may not have it as bad as other's but i'm still tripping trying to black out the vision of the 38 my father was gripping i'll admit i get money now but it came with a price a price of 39 years down the drain after he took his life all of last year was just full of empty promises restless nights i wake up in a cold sweat and check what time it is i've tried to move on with my current girl looking for a diamond that fits last year hit me harder then a defensive lineman hits and many probably thought i'd fail but i'm not gonna quit ProVerse's Verse: I am not the lord, I have limits,I am human I hurt more the what is shown in my apperance School,rap,fights,up way too my nights I am quite stressed the press...of the pressure of the many objectives and answering to many questions Making gestures sending a messge that I am stressing It's either not heared or Purposley Ignored this easy street life you live I'm sorry to spoil but I'm getting HotHeaded and my frame beggining to boil If your figure the thought I'm wrong, i'm Prone leave me alone,or I predict your request to be postponed unless a payback in fact will be loned... I am not immortal,I cannot handle any hurdle even with the dirt It's hard for me to stay Fertle and keep a smile on my face,though every grin is erased and replaced with a look of the enegy that I waste... hold on.... Once again I hear another Demanding Mouth I veiw the top and lower lip bounce.... in and out.....the house... I cannot do everything you desire check my reaction they way i'm acting Prior... to the desire from the cruelest.... do this, clean tires...can't you see that i'm tired? and this game of life I think I wanna retire if it means Death....I guess... this last verse I spit will also be my last breath.... at least....my deseast will feel more like a Relief... no word can effect the way I feel...not even please... you would think with this cold world time will freeze... With all this pain that's in me, I think its time I leave... peace! Lookin foward to doing another collab with ya Senario PM me again soon Senario youz a Genious man I just finished reading your Verse dawg....nice for real ~1~ |
thanks for the opprotunity to work with u proverse, just to let ya know everything in my verse is true my ex-girlfriend Kimberly Holton was murdered last sept.30, she was pregnant and cops from delaware and nj questioned me and on may 2nd of this year i saw my father kill himself, but anyways don't really wanna get into all that, we uppin for honest feedback
|
damn...
that's alotta sit to handle mayn... stay strong with that..... you gonna gt yo karma soon... with every gun theres always a rose 1luv |
thanks, proverse, i'm still struggling with it, it's hard though, i miss all of them so much but i can't do anything to change any of it
|
I edited my Verse Senario
ad I jus read ur WHOLE verse I only read the 1st part then I had to leave at 1st nice and You almost as good as me lol peace |
yup......good shit fellas...M.K stand up keep reppin.....Proverse...
|
holy shit, this was dope, you both did a great job with capturing the topic, the flow was impeccable, and both verse fit perfect together, great job both of you, this was a pleasure to read, and great vocab and rhymin skills.................pc
|
thannks everybody for criting
yet again only my crew crits lol I can count on yaw niggas for anything can't I? lol I'm gonna do another open mic myself and another Poem ps.I'm gonna battle again peace |
uppin for more feedback people, thanks for the feedback so far
|
nice, flow was good,both stayed on topic...way ta rep proverse,
scenrio nice job 2....keep it up.... |
nice drop fellas i was feelin this shit.....
|
YOOOOOO THIS WAS FUCKING DOPE AS FUCK SCENERIO DAMN IM HAPPY I SIGNED YOU TO THE CREW DOPE FUCKING SHIT FO REAL SHIT WA FUCKING OFFICAL PRO DOPE ALSO HERE YOU GOTTA GET SOME KIND OF BETTER FLOW TO YOUR SHIT IT BE HARD TO READ BUT I GOT IT YO TIS IS FUCKING OFFICAL WHAT MORE CAN I SAY :thumbup: :thumbup: :thumbup:
|
thanx yaz everybody for all the crits
I feel loved :)...lol j/p remember this for best open mic <~~~~never won an award lol peace niggas and empire thanx for critn both my open mics |
thanks for the feedback we uppin for more of it and yes remember this for best open mic, i ain't ever won an award either, i stay in steady rotation niggas, lol, ain't nobody fucking with this proverse, we uppin for feedback
|
uppin for more feedback on this and my other open mic's
|
| All times are GMT -4. The time now is 09:41 AM. |