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d.j em sce vs CriTiC
Battle Rulez:
10 - UNLIMITED Linez No Crew Votez No Recycling No Biting .:Topical Battle:. Topic Is,,.. Love For Another Person Good Luck PC Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 09-30-04 at 03:37 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
d.j em sce has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-27-04 03:39 PM.
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CriTiC has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-27-04 03:49 PM.
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aight i wrote this for my girl......i love you shea... As this new task called love arrives we sit and patiently wait As we rise to a new level we surpass sex , love, and hate As we recreate this thing called love, i realize my true position As i begin to doubt my love, you help me find my exact ambition As my heart dims you cliam we are more than just friends As these tears of hate trickle down my cheek we begin to transcend despite the fact we have our ups and downs, the result will saty the same i commit myself to our lve, i set ablaze this adoring flame see in your minds eyes a passion so great it makes your entire body quiver but everytime time we argue your words seep beneath my skin like a sliver our feel of affection for one another was previously insecure however, as we grew closer as a couple our love begins to mature As i contianed these thoughts that confuse and belittle my soul As these thoughts baffle my mentality you helped me gain control As soon as we touched lips i knew our hears would soon collide As this cllision occures my heart, body, and soul i strive to provide As our affection for each other begins to build, we set in motion to entwine As i momentarily look into our future i initiate to slip into time ...love is real... |
hurry up kid oyu is taking hella long..........j/k but for real hurry up
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My eyes captured by her beauty, my minds left to crave
Raved about your body, now I’m trapped as your slave You materialized before me, my soul existents is for you Show me the true meaning of love, you know it takes two Four months my advancements were deflected or sadly in vain You didn’t like the phone sex you said it wouldn’t be the same Finally information was leaked about her parents being away No way was I going to miss an opportunity it’s time for us to play Heart beating triple time as I reach to press the bell Yelled up to your window, Like I’m under your spell You opened the door with excitement, readiness on your face I can’t believe this is our moment, in your parents resting place The window began to condensate, as the passion started to spark I caressed her lips gently I’m now on a mission to leave my mark Just as we began to entwine I heard a key being placed in the door So we jumped out of bed swiftly & recovered clothes off the floor We entered he bedroom quietly and sat at opposite sides of the bed Read the television listings loudly,,.. if her dad finds out I’m dead Later on that night as I drifted off to sleep, she slowly moved off her bed She started to embrace me like she did before, readiness her face again read Our bodies entwined locked in the most passionate moment of our life To this day we still love each other, and a year ago she became my wife ~Married a year and two months now and we are still goin strong haha~ peace |
UP~InG Come on now honest votes please,,..
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aight i wrote this for my girl......i love you shea... As this new task called love arrives we sit and patiently wait As we rise to a new level we surpass sex , love, and hate As we recreate this thing called love, i realize my true position As i begin to doubt my love, you help me find my exact ambition As my heart dims you cliam we are more than just friends As these tears of hate trickle down my cheek we begin to transcend despite the fact we have our ups and downs, the result will saty the same i commit myself to our lve, i set ablaze this adoring flame see in your minds eyes a passion so great it makes your entire body quiver but everytime time we argue your words seep beneath my skin like a sliver our feel of affection for one another was previously insecure however, as we grew closer as a couple our love begins to mature As i contianed these thoughts that confuse and belittle my soul As these thoughts baffle my mentality you helped me gain control As soon as we touched lips i knew our hears would soon collide As this cllision occures my heart, body, and soul i strive to provide As our affection for each other begins to build, we set in motion to entwine As i momentarily look into our future i initiate to slip into time ...love is real... |
Voted For: d.j em sce
i chose d.j em sces verse because it not only appealed to me more than Critics, but it was just that much better...em sce wins this coz this wasnt just a battle, but something more...anyways... critic urs was aight...but it just didnt quite flow ya knoe...g'luck |
Alright no hate but I think that bullshit! plus your IP's match
so I going to send an E~mail to Strobe to check this shit out. |
we go to the same school...me phat mic,lyrical havok,big woody,and jackofalltrades
so we all have the same ips...same school server...sorry In the future, don't vote in each other's battle just in case.... |
uppin for votes.......c'mon where they at............................
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Come on Uping this.......................................
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uppin for votes............................................. .
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Voted For: d.j em sce
iight i dont like thwe topic cuz............how arent u sposed to be with someone else?....anywho... critic- good shit homie, i like the story but for me it kinda felt off topic and shit like u was talkin bout fuckin instead oif talkin bout ya love ya know? it was reall good other than that decent imagery and shit......7/10 dj- another hot drop kid. you stuck on topic, i loved it all and the only thing i wanna complain about is how almost every line started with "as"...that got realllllly annoying. other than that i feel that you beat crit, but it was close.....7.5/10 RTF....links in the sig homies. |
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