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One Last Kiss
First Attempt at poetry.. From day one i always knew that love was my main purpose.. and i have been doing just that since i have been walkin the earths surface now we are holding hands palms sweaty she knows im nervous.. but i gotta tell her the truth theres no way she deserves this... so i hold her tight.. whisper in her ear.. that something just not right.. contemplating suicide.. and if she doesnt leave i will be taking her life... she said " no this can't be" and thats when i took out that knife.. three thrusts to the breast... their goes.. my future wife... as i look at my bloody hands i wonder whyit had to be like this.. our love was so warm and tender.. thats something i will miss... she didnt believe me... and got in the way of danger took the risk.. so i lean towards her bloody body.. and give my pregnant fiance... One Last Kiss.... |
wow, damn homey, this was a good drop, a little eery, but well written for your first poem, keep em comin, i'm intrigued....pc
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lmao yeah i realized once i read it over that it was a little weird.. lmao im gonna stick with this poetry stuff..
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damn...returnin da feedback to ya....some nice shit right hurr....big upps......
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uppin for feed..
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holy shit homie, that shit is tight, makes me like think aobut taht shit and stuff..... nice drop///
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you this however was a half decent poem man...better from the father figure poem.this is actually a poem lol...it had imagery,emotion as well as the thought put into this peace.....nice job man keep at it
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oh shit man wasnt expectin it to take that turn in the middle but hey it was really good so keep it up aight lata playa
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this is ur first poem, but it's written well, very nice and good concept..... this ya girl fiya..
best lines: so i hold her tight.. whisper in her ear.. that something just not right.. contemplating suicide.. and if she doesnt leave i will be taking her life... she said " no this can't be" and thats when i took out that knife.. three thrusts to the breast... their goes.. my future wife... ^really nicely put..^ |
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Loved The Whole Murder Scene Keep Droppin This Eery Ass Poetry On The Murda Tip Loved It |
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