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one more for the hell of it (PLEASE READ)
hey, im leavin (*sob*) but im workin on a song currently for when i make my big comeback. i aint got a name, hell, i aint even finished the 1st verse, but i still wanna post it. check this out
who woulda known id grow up 2 b such a lyrical genius/ date such a fag, slice off both balls from his penis/ dangle his dick right in front of his face (ha ha!)/ am i suckin hard enough now?! blast fuckin semen all over the place/ cmon, bitch, wanna take advatnage of me now? grab my chest and use me 4 sex/ well i guess i aint got a choice, im 2 high 2 fight back, i knew i shoulda refused that X/ cause i hate u, y the fuck did i date u?/ i should rape u, all iwanted was a thank u/ i did so much shit for u, u never took the time for a glance/ that bitch swingin her thong up in ur face, the hos got u in trance/ do i not mean shit 2 u? i thought that we were sumthin?/ but im stuck another night at home, naked, watchin ur body humpin/ im sick of bein white trash, its time 2 make a come back/ u gonna git ur nuts cracked, im more than just a big rack, boy ima make ur guts clap/ squirtin outta ur mouth, unless u watch the shit u speakin/ im cut all ur limbs off, we aint even close 2 the weekend thats all i got. sum feedback please!!! |
please, a lil feedback for me?????????????????????
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wow its like an "encoure"...\\but 4 real this had some allright stuff in it. Rhyme's are simple. but it's a lot better than your remix to my band.Keep droping and elavating.....pz
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thanx, more feedback pleez!
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wut the hell else u expect me 2 say???? PLEASE READ MY SHIT!!!
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cmon yall.... uppin 4 feedback please!!!
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aight it was aight.....u really need to work on your flow and like @ sed ur rhymmes are too simple....stay up
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yea ma...this was a simple rhyme, but u should eventually get it right. the rhyme was sick though...a lot of anger. keep it up though. peace
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The 1st few opening lines put some discomfort in my regions but an aight spit still need work but hey we all need elevation...keep it up...hopefully u'll come back :thumbup:
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