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night crawler 09-30-04 05:23 PM

war aint a good thing ..... check it
 
im bout to spit the truth
sit back and watch how he kills our youth
how many parents gotta hear in a letter their son is dead
you the one that pumped them full with lead
they was hopin to get money for an education
all u left was cryin parents hopin for the kids reincarnation
the kid was cryin on the phone
he didn't wanna die in a war zone
only fear was runnin trough his head
youngsta was sure this ment to be his death
i saw it up the new mothers were prayin
"dear lord save our baby" all they seen was dark rain
fight for your country now u ready to give away your life
what gone happen to his son , the lil one passed the age of five
what the meaning of war , we killin ourselfs the human rase
whoever started shit , remember hes a big disgrase

Ysdat 09-30-04 05:30 PM

deep! i like this sort of reality shit. this is a real issue. You could of got more tech with it and expanded a bit. but you had some allright point's in this. Flow is off in spot's because you stretched the line's. You have some nice rhyme's in it... good drop ...keep elevating..pz

night crawler 09-30-04 05:33 PM

ty bruh
am writin stuff like this for only a few days
uppin ..........

~Lady Fiya~ 09-30-04 06:45 PM

best lines:
only fear was runnin trough his head
youngsta was sure this ment to be his death
i saw it up the new mothers were prayin
"dear lord save our baby" all they seen was dark rain

^^i really liked this poem very nice.. good job......
~Lady Fiya~ peep my links my collab with anxiety and L.I. or my battles, aight
pz


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