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...War/Terrorism...
I Was Just Thinking About This Subject And Decided To Write A Peice About It.....
I Hear Agonizing Screams That Seem To Penatrate The Shelter Roof
Out Of Anyone's Control It's Taken Over, No-one Can Stop This Fued My Mind Projects Formidable Images That Could Daunt the Darkest Heart Left Inprinted On My Skull, Any Hope Of Survival Is Beyond Afar A Lay awake At Night, Who Could Sleep In These Abismal Conditions Will We Be Free? There Has Been A Build Of Doubtful Suspisions Atmosphere Is Clouded As Are My Thought Both Seem Unsure Confusion Is Amongst Us, War Has Taken Over, For That I Can Be Sure A Small Infant Crying, Are These Concequences Deserved The Damage Has Bin Executed, Hard To Translate Into Words The Pain Is Immense The Heartbroken Families Pain Is Felt Young Man And Women, A Babys Life Taken, Yet Heads Are Still Held? Suffering Is Forever Scarred Upon The Relatives Of Those Lives Taken Hurtful Tears Are Shead, Nothing Can Relate To Thier Eternal Aching Hundreds Of Lives Snatched In these Violent Acts I'm Merley Stating Fact Causing Pain And Hurt, These Are The Results of Terorrist Acts Drop Some FeedBack Please........... |
reminds me of myself, when i first began. great memories, nice topic.
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lol, Yeah Thanks, I Think. Yeah This Was My First Topical... Shared With Tha Site................
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Uppin fOr Some Feedback Please...........................
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lmfao it was good....but why tha fuck you change ya name thats wack as fuck lmfao i liked LE an this wasnt your first topical i remember all them dope ones you used to do.....now i got that outta my system i am calm....
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Huh.... :huh: I Don't Get Ya I Aint L.E...................
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oh sorry lmfao sorry who are you?....the avy confoooooosed me...
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ayo man that shit was tight...specially for a first topical...flow was mos def on point...vocab was the way i like it-complex but not overly complicated...and i feel its message was delivered in a couple different ways...keep up dog...1
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hmmm.. nice topic... alot of topic are like this except your was more unique...... had allot of thoughs and the imagery was good.... structre was iight you.. remind me allot of 9/11
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Thanks For The FeedBack..............
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Uppin...................................
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not to bad..for the most part..it's just really strectched in many places..
keep up though...peace |
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