Bradley_thomas vs x-on
 

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Check in by: 10-05-04 at 07:02 PM

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x-on has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-02-04 07:03 PM.

Alright, let's do this 705 baby, X-ON... "Underground shit"

here we go...
X-ON fails to comprhend why he wants to battle with a record of "0-2"?
Parimative player?, dog you a "child" what's your name Braddley who//?
Thomas? blain, no originality that's why I'm a hate to add an other loss/
Cause to rap your the minimum wage worker and i'm the overpaid boss//
There hope for this cat ever here of "GOD LOVES UGLY" from slug?/
Cause I know your a nasty fag from your interest you no thug//
Fuck being optimist, I'm a bring every negative characteritic and put them in fright/
Do yourself and every member a favor and log of this dam fucking site//
And look at yourself, little stewy as your pic wow what a dam baby~/
So i'm a take this battle as if it was a fucking giant bar of "candy~//
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1-this kid is a child he is 13.. for real step off.

2-nice name guy.. real original..

3- Slug aka Atmoshpere he had a cd called " God Loves Ugly" and there was a song called " god loves ugly" and befor the song there is a little skit saying how fucking ugly he is.. bla bla.. so in other word you budy..

4- Interest, Track, Cross country, Soccer.. Oh no thug life baby. lol My girls play them sports dog..

5-optomistic is seeing everything positive..
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Holla back.. X-on.. " Mind of Vison"...

Yo that's first battle was cheap you didn't deserve to win.. Bitch ass.. your rhymes are so weak. No flow. shit done hommy. this was my verse bitch ass..

bradley_thomas has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-02-04 07:33 PM.

this is my shit right here//singin songs and drinkin bear//woopin ur ass//top of my class//gratuated as a criminal//ur alive till i come//woop ur ass ur strung//rip out ur tounge//isnt tis fun//tie u down, ur bakin in the sun//ur diein slow liek u r suppose to//ur turned around and in ur ass is my shoe//make u eat tofu//taste like shit//i wipe u like the dog u r//woopin ur ass in the bar//leave u wit no legs and some scars//i got ot go now so long for now//as always i take my bow//

ok so i play hard sports os i can out run out perform and flat out beat all my brother thugs and have energy to spare

and i used my real name cause if i go up then im goin as me not some fucked up nick name lik x-on

Voted For: x-on

OK BRADLEY NO PUNCHES OR GOOD DISSES FUCKED UP STRUCTURE OK VOCAB AND MULTIS AINT THERE = A WEAK ASS VERSE YOU NEED TO ELEVATE FOR REAL A 1/10
X LOL GOOS OPENER HERE ON HIS NAME AND HOW HES STILL A NOBODY BUT I NEVER HEARD OF YOU NEITHER LOL SECOND PUNCH WAS OK NOT VERY CEATIVE BUT OK THUG LINE WACK ENDER WACK ALSO NO MULTIS GOOD STRUCTURE AND FLOW WITH A LITTLE BETTER PUNCHES GOT YOU THIS AND A DECNT VOCAB STILL YOU NEED TO ELEVATE ALSO A 4/10

alright. thanks man... holla with some more votes.. let's get this done with.

Voted For: x-on

Bradley_Thomas’s Verse
this is my shit right here//
singin songs and drinkin bear//
woopin ur ass//
top of my class//
gratuated as a criminal//
ur alive till i come//
woop ur ass ur strung//
rip out ur tounge//
isnt tis fun//
tie u down, ur bakin in the sun//
ur diein slow liek u r suppose to//
ur turned around and in ur ass is my shoe//
make u eat tofu//
taste like shit//i wipe u like the dog u r//
woopin ur ass in the bar//
leave u wit no legs and some scars//
i got ot go now so long for now//
as always i take my bow//
4/10
ur verse wasn’t any~good…kinda suck’d…
fix yo structure…work on ya flow…and ur
punches need to be harder…

X-On’s Verse
-ON fails to comprhend why he wants to battle with a record of "0-2"?
Parimative player?, dog you a "child" what's your name Braddley who//?
5/10
Thomas? blain, no originality that's why I'm a hate to add an other loss/
Cause to rap your the minimum wage worker and i'm the overpaid boss//
6/10
There hope for this cat ever here of "GOD LOVES UGLY" from slug?/
Cause I know your a nasty fag from your interest you no thug//
6/10
Fuck being optimist, I'm a bring every negative characteritic and put them in fright/
Do yourself and every member a favor and log of this dam fucking site//
7/10
And look at yourself, little stewy as your pic wow what a dam baby~/
So i'm a take this battle as if it was a fucking giant bar of "candy~//
6/10
u practically killed Bradley_thomas mayn…any
u had a pretty decent punches…and a nice flow
elevate more tho…
…Peace

Voted For: x-on

Obviously x-on won this it was a ass battle anywhere i done said better rhymes while sleeping you both need to elevate... bradley u have no structure or real punches what-so-ever.. everything was mashed together and written poorly... x-on your verse was basic and didnt hold many good punches.. u had a decent verse but i suggest going back to front lines to elevate cuz your not ready for EFL yet..

Voted For: x-on

ok bradley trash ass flow and structure no good disses or punches here vocab ok you failed to hurt your oppenant in anyway 2/10
xon good disses and decent punches ender sucked though flow was good as fuck as wwell as structure 4/10
this was a wack battle but xon took it with better punches and disses

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Voted For: x-on

Bradley your structure was just way off. You gotta space your lines so they do't run together, and they're easier to follow. Also you gotta work on your punches. You had some multis but they didn't really matter if the punches weren't gonna land. And don't use "//"anymore, it's newbish...
X-on your punches were aight you had some good vocab, but your lines were a little stretched. And for the record, it was Atmosphere, not Slug, but you knew it was one of 'em. But for future referrence, try to get your lines across in a manner that doesn't require many explanations...
V//X-On

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