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KiTTie 10-04-04 06:23 PM

Just Fuck It
 
i know yall read summa my shit that i let git preveiwed, and i was sittin in math class 2day and i figured out the rest of the 1st verse. its raw and needs sum changes but check it:

now im not normally a violent person, unless u give me a reaspn/
but if u pop shit about me, ill shoot u, even if bitch aint in season/
so just cause im a woman dont mean i cant b violent/
in such a sick world, multiple gunshots wont even make media silent/
its like murder is a game, like a sport or a hobby/
hundreds of ppl git killed everyday, but my song aint about 2 git sobby/
i aint tryin 2 preach, i got 2 much of a backround/
but in my case, if rappin effects were like wrestlin, my lyrics a smackdown/
ive been thru tough times, haters hatin my shit/
drugs, sex, and violence, emotional relationships/
bitch u know im talkin bout u, so dont fuckin deny it/
my records out n exposed, so u cant just hide my shit/
u raped me bitch, made me pay 4 my own abortion 2/
but u aint gittin away with this im out 2 torture u/
who woulda known id grow up 2 b such a lyrical genius/
date such a fag, slice off both balls from his penis/
dangle his dick right in front of his face (ha ha!)/
am i suckin hard enough now?! blast fuckin semen all over the place/
cmon, bitch, wanna take advatnage of me now? grab my chest and use me 4 sex/
well i guess i aint got a choice, im 2 high 2 fight back, i knew i shoulda refused that X/
cause i hate u, y the fuck did i date u?/
i should rape u, all iwanted was a thank u/
i did so much shit for u, u never took the time for a glance/
that bitch swingin her thong up in ur face, the hos got u in trance/
do i not mean shit 2 u? i thought that we were sumthin?/
but im stuck another night at home, naked, watchin ur body humpin/
im sick of bein white trash, its time 2 make a come back/
u gonna git ur nuts cracked, im more than just a big rack, boy ima make ur guts clap/
squirtin outta ur mouth, unless u watch the shit u speakin/
im cut all ur limbs off, we aint even close 2 the weekend/
so watch wut u say, else ur out 4 a bitch smack/
think im playin around, but u better just watch yo back!!!



FEEDBACK PLEASE!!! :whacky:

KiTTie 10-04-04 06:35 PM

PLEASE!!! uppin 4 feedback!!! HOLLA AT YO GIRL!!!!

KiTTie 10-04-04 06:58 PM

cmon yall.... uppin 4 feedback. tell me wut u think....

N.E.T 10-04-04 07:09 PM

yo is you related to yvonne + yo im feeln it 7/10.

KiTTie 10-04-04 07:11 PM

thanx... no, i truthfully didnt even know she was on this site til she claimed i stole her name... mines pronounced (A-von) 2 clear up any misunderstandings.....

UPPIN 4 feedback, yo holla!

Red Stroke 10-04-04 07:22 PM

lol woooooooooooooooooooo YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe that shit was funny

KiTTie 10-04-04 07:23 PM

that good?

UPPIN!!! IVE BEEN WORKIN AND I WANT FEEDBACK ON MY NEW SHIT!!!

KiTTie 10-05-04 07:46 AM

uppin 4 feedback please! i wanna know wut yall think of the "new" eyvon!!!

Big Gaz 10-05-04 03:57 PM

That was ill.......a lil psycho but I could feel the emotion in that verse, props. Please check my verse out.

KiTTie 10-06-04 07:40 AM

aight, thanx. UPPIN 4 FEEDBACK! I WANNA KNOW WUT YALL THINK!!!

KiTTie 10-07-04 07:54 AM

uppin 4 feedback please!!!

Cerulean 10-07-04 12:44 PM

I was feeling the subject matter and you had some real depth and emotion in your words, but stylistically it was pretty basic and the flow was only ok. Keep it up though, I realize this is only a rough draft so the final piece should be dope. 6/10.

P.S. If you got time return the favour and check out "Fulcrum Shift" by me. Peace

KiTTie 10-07-04 05:55 PM

consider it done! hey is that u in ur sig? if it is u fli boy.... btw, uppin 4 feedback....

KiTTie 10-07-04 06:35 PM

cmon uppin 4 feedback ASAP! thanx peace!!!

¤ÐÅž¤ 10-07-04 06:46 PM

i thought it was good< better then i was expecting ..*nice job*
i seen ya going for hatefull n sevear shit..lol...
some wordin issues but overall you had some nice content..
i liked the nice rack/guts clap line< flowed well.....
can ya hit up the diss in my sig??...
thanx...


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