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BIGPAPPA76 vs ...Apocalypse...
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topic heaven an hell 50 lines max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 250 Check in by: 10-05-04 at 02:43 AM Must drop verse in 360 minutes after check in. |
...Apocalypse... has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-04-04 11:44 PM.
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BIGPAPPA76 has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-04-04 11:46 PM.
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durring life we all wonder, what is hevan and what is hell
take it from this soul, pray for hevan when death rings its bell as a soul i have seen it all but still i roam from that day i was layed to rest near the churches dome i have seen everything on earth, above and below i ended up in heven that day in late july the year 1923 they tell me i was gunned down for no other reason except i was me as i stand in awe at the sight of the pearly gates, my eyes open wide for the uphoria that i see is unlike any i could see in my mind my attention was taken by saint peter with his big white book he told me i had done wrong and no way was i gettin off tha hook my mind was blown... i couldnt believe what my ears have heard next thing i know i was before satan before i could speak a word he screamed "SILENCE TO THE SINNER AND THE FOOL!!" i looked around to see myself surrounded by deamons and a fiery pool satan stood before me, his horns sharp to the point i thought to my self, " i gotta get outta this joint" big satan was standin tall with pitch fork in hand "BE PREPARED FOR AN ETERNITY IN THIS FIERY LAND!!" i droped to my knees and prayed for one more chance satan looked me dead in the eyes and put me in a deep trance "do you deserve another chance", he spoke softly in my ear when i nodded yes a grin came over his face with a snear satan said "your wish is granted" and up i rose i looked at my self wearin my death day clothes in the same seedy ally i was shot in next to some sleezy bimbo i asked were i was, she replied "a place known only as limbo" a puzzled thought came to my mind, the devil played me fo sho why i was put into this position i will never quite know but for an eternity i am here, ive seen my hommies grow old and die so many fuckin years have passed and gone by but still i sit here in this, my unfinished world this is the ultimiate nightmare, horror times 2 and twirled so many years this sould has seen always thinking of what might have been how with tomorow i will still be in this, my form of hell no one will ever know my plite, i have no one to tell so when you wonder as you lie in bed at night, what is hell and hevan just think of me, the soul whom a second chance was givin BIGPAPPA76 |
damn... i fucked up and forgot to rhyme a line... woops... still a solid drop i think... not bad.. hope its enough
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...Heaven... Feeling ignored, neglected, constantly "un-respected" The games god plays is like a losing set of "checkers.." It all started at first, when my wife riped my "heart out.." Began losing days sleeping, not eating, suffering "hard out.." only jesus christ himself can contridict my "actions" judge my whole life...not just my dark sided "fractions" so everyday i pray on my death bed to see "heaven" as i go to church to tarnish my past an spill my soul to tha "reveren" ive done alot of dirty deed's through life i planted wrongful "seeds" for-filling crack addicts needs to feel pain brings joy as on tha cross jesus bleeds i commited awful sins an saw satan solemly grin as christ "frowns" money was thin pushin cocaine by tha pounds now my money in "mounds" but that wasnt tha life to lead just anutha statistic drawn to "greed" simplicity is the key now ive grown aware that only this bible i "need" everything does happen for a reason born into this world a "hethen" i was blinded to see then holy father all i needed was somethin to belive in maybe that coulda prevented tha evil things ive "commited" but as i grasp this bible tha wings of heaven have me "uplifted" my note book provides my knowlege to all tha things i "know" as i flat line iv bags sink low........its my time to "go" ...Hell... Skitsophrenic intentions for the sadistic ending of life.. What problems, Im never fearing any form of worldly strife.. Living on the bad side of the tracks, became my own slogan.. Needing lies to break many men, grasping the truth broken.. My mind, it would seem is an evil chaotic artistic tapestry.. Plagued with horrific visions, Im dead living, actually.. I couldnt seperate, thin lines between whats real and fiction.. Compleatly insane, its unknown to the extent of my addiction.. Fuck it, I am the devil.. Disguised in the skin of a man.. Death, violance, curruption and terror, are all considered fam.. The four horsemen lead my apocolypse, Famine controls my legion.. God, look at me now!! The red dragon, Collapsing the garden of edin.. You see, no longer mortal, slitting my wrists not feeling pain.. But I am numb.. My sight fades as blood runs down the drain.. The sensation is something Ive forgotton for many years.. What have I done, I now know why blood is thicker then tears.. Im ruined.. A distraught mind, staring at a blood clenched fist.. Finally my eyes close, now Im surrounded in an endless red mist. |
Voted For: ...Apocalypse...
Have to go wit Virtue cuz he had imagery and emotions the other guy work on imagery and transitions to make the flow more smoother Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
and to deadly visions work on EXPLAINING YA VOTES.......................uppin
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uppin this shit.............................................. ..........
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Voted For: ...Apocalypse...
vote to apacolspe, i liked his verse, had a nice flow to it and some vocabulary, i liked how he seperaed the two subjest but they still inteveiined, vote goes to the old genoius |
goddamn, more unexplained votes.........shit..............
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Voted For: ...Apocalypse...
bigpappa: i never saw any of your topicals before.............. and i have to say its pretty good in my opinion.... flow was smooth and nice emotion.................... depth was okay...and i felt it a little................. overall: 7/10 ...Apocalypse...: as usual you brung the heat dude.................. emotion was clearly there and i felt it heart-warming:p ummm.....nice depth and dopeness dude....... overall: 8.5/10 |
w33rd.....thanks creative uppin for more votes.....
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Voted For: ...Apocalypse...
Apocalypse won.. Flow- Apoc Structure- Apoc Emotion- Apoc Meaning- Apoc Vote- Apoc Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
uppin this shit...........................................
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