what u think
 

Yo im from the city of brothaly love/
Wanna battle me?/
Ill drop lyrical death from above/
u can bring peace like a dove/
dont matter/
I dont show mercy or love/
ill be the 1st to blast/
bitch ill kick ya ass/
rip u bad/
Like The Executioner fights/
Make u wish u never grabbed a mic/

U want lyrical fitness?/
Im 93 like the freak/
Ima take ova this bizness/
Ya rymes are weak/
Ya attempt is meek/
My skill is the realest/
My rhymes are sick/
Like 2pac n canibis/
Mayb ill crucify u in verse/
watch u leave in a hearse/
Naw, My flow is to raw/

critique plz

whats up partna aye yo dont use that "/" it makes it look corny go check out some of everybodys structure and be creative and use some of it but ya flow was aiight but you gotta ellivate like me mayn i know i gotta ellivate too dont worry cuzz you get better