Lyrical Disciple vs death tearz
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
looser pays tha winner 500 RV dollars

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-12-04 at 08:41 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Lyrical Disciple has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-09-04 08:41 PM.

when this nigga accept my battle he gone be in tha shadow of "death"
cryin pure "tears" runnin outta breath
ya name is"death" so imma make uhm "cry with pain"
i aint gone come that hard tho im gone try to refrain
for i have murk you and snatch ya chain
ill turn ya head into a "skull" like tha one in ya "sig"
then crack it open you feel me nig?
you about to "loose" this battle so i guess its ya "pride"
nigga ya rhymes is played out so dont try to hide
some body give me "$20" and ill have this fool "beat"
i flow continously and never stay discrete
yea for me this is "priceless" i battles you and fucked ya gurl
but for you it cost money cuzz you chase "nuts" like a "squirl"
see i aint scared of "death" so dont think ya tuff
ya rhymes is weak why dont you join ruff(ruff tuff thug)
so just cough up my 500 dollars
for i have you in "shock" like dogg "collars"

so you gone spit or what cuzzo?? lemme know mayn what is this

ya sry i aint been on for a bit. ill spit as soon as i can

death tearz has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-11-04 09:32 PM.

no prollem mayn just take ya time lil hommie bet you dont remember me

no rush nigga just meet tha dead line tho feel me //

remember you why the hell would i know some wanna be MC tryin to make some dough*
read your open mics and seen your flow and i think open mics are all you know**
lyrical disciple u need to follow and heres you god but hes not a vet or a mod
u need someone better than the people in your squad cuz read most of em and no one applauds
clowning fake emcees boy that sure is dissapointing u have done yourself witout knowing
canibus? your herbnus is showing and listen to the words im stressing, im not lying bro your raps are dying.
your two wins are against newbs who arent even in a crappy crew
youve been graced to lose to red beam, didnt kno hed battle you, who knew?
you should be Banned: trying to be a man and not a dumbass fan
u can rap as hard as u can but you will never make it to the headlines at a newstand
take out your agression in a different message and try to learn this lesson
there is a reason for you to stop rapping and it is that it is the end of "being an herb" season.

*every battle is for money
** his open mics r his best works

solid drop uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: Lyrical Disciple

Lyrical Disciple: pretty good structure only one stretched line,
nice punches, good meta's specially the squirl one, lol, pretty good flow, few good personals, few multi's, good opener and even better closer. 7.5/10


DeathTearz: overall not a good verse, words weren't rhyming such as knowing/dying, structure was bad, flow was ok, some of ya lines didn't make sense either "your two wins are against newbs who aren't even in a crappy crew" that line would mean he beat respectable emcees, didn't really see any thing that stood out u could elevate all around make ya verse funny, use some better punches, some better meat's, try to learn how to use multi's, elevate all around, ya main problem was words not rhyming such as lesson/season, if ya structure was correct u might have won cause u have words in lines that rhyme with the ending word but that's not how it's susspose to be, u also gave him pros for his open mics in ya verse and in ya explanations. 2.5/10


vote: Lyrical Disciple


no hate to any of ya, return the honest votes, battles r in my sig

uppin on votes get at this battle right here mayn .......

uppin on votes come on niggas get at this shit right here

This was feedback posted for Lyrical Disciple
 

lyrical came a bit harder but wasnt feelin his verse.
death tearz you need to elevate.

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