Many Men (Street Version)FT Oreo
 

(me talking) ha ha we got tha next Em right here yea
Epic
watch niggas get murdered on tha block with Chrome
cops flock tha block niggas be long gone
niggas want me dead right now as in today
ya feeling tuff they let ya teck spray
Gods on my side hommie what you gone say to that
he wont let me die and thats a true fact
suspicious cars threw tha block niggas be like "who that"
you already know thats me comin threw tha block
no cops no DA's just us niggas sellin Rocks
Perlii Gates aint waitin my arrival
cuzz im gone fight for survival
niggas dont know about my existance
but get hit from a 45 long distance
God wont let me die unless i got fear in my eye
Question my authority ill have you lookin to tha sky

Epic
its alot of Men out there who wont us dead
no fear no doubt we dont have a dread
strong survive and its either us or them
one ticket one trip will send you to tha land of tha dead
where old corpse and shit is tha only way you'll be gettin head

Oreo
i aint trying to get my casket closed,
the lord love me but i dont wanna go the path he choose,
take away these hoes, all the fancy clothes,
got fiends trying to burn me faster than an ounce of dro,
people dieyin that aint even tryin to get in the way of the iron,
cuz i aint lyieng, i can take a look outside and see a body lying,
you aint a killa at all, at least you tried,
lesson1, no one lives for ever, even superman died,
lesson2,put your money where your mouth is they both get stolen,
three,watch your back its either me or the cops patrolin,
and 4, fuck with me,polise be "etch-a-sketchin" somebody,
and wat you scared for?they say iron good for the body,
dont come my way, no-one wants to live in soorow,
and dont go to sleep tonight if you plan on waking up tommorow,

Epic
its alot of Men out there who wont us dead
no fear no doubt we dont have a dread
strong survive and its either us or them
one ticket one trip will send you to tha land of tha dead
where old corpse and shit is tha only way you'll be gettin head

uppin on sone feedback on this

tha second verse ie Oreo my fault forgot to put that

wasnt feelin it........up ya vocab fix ya structure......go leave feed on mine open mic damn he's back.........

uppin for more feedbakc

uppon yall and check the remix................
lyrical see if you can click edit let em know my verse oreo gots second one yall

how i do that????

iight. You gotta first stop talkin bout all that hood shit cuz we have heard it all already. Thats the main reason your not gettin much feedback. Second, you gotta work on vocab and structure/flow cuz right now its not that good. This is to both. Seriously try to go deeper into it then just "bang bang, bang bang".

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that was just a random topic and shit man, but yeah i know there is more but that was the topic that was choosen, i went with the tipoc ya feel

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this was...BULLSHIT...lol...it wasn't all that good tho...nothing special and needs a little work

Word Up This Was One Of My First Open Mic Others Is Better