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TuNiT 10-17-04 08:11 AM

mah 1st free on dis site!!!!!!!
 
i gots gunz n knivez///
stay fuckin nunz n wives//
i'ma sikk cold azz nigga///
at just 13 n i already dun pulled da trigga///
they dont come much hotter than me///
check the vocabulary of an elementary free///(freestyle)
i became a man when my father dropped da ball//
lyke dmx i gotz chall niggas sliipn n ready 2 fall//
i'm all bout dem benjamins fuck a nigga dat shot call//
have u ever seen a nigga at 13 standin 8 tall??///
fuck all yall lyke da homie pac said//
i'm my own damn mane with pyshco thought runnin thru mah head///
derez gone be blood shed but it wont be mine///
i'll cut off yo arms n use dem 2 read da time///
diz iz t-unit n i aint even a rapper///
hand over yo momma n sit back n watch me slap-her!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

TuNiT 10-17-04 08:12 AM

iz diz okay do chall lyke it??????????????????

Introspect. 10-17-04 08:12 AM

lmao you got a lot of work...up ya vocab fix ya structure...an dont use // its herbish an dont rap about thug shit....be intelligent not toddler rhymes...go leave sum feed on -damn hes back- my shit cause well i'm back...

TuNiT 10-17-04 08:14 AM

kool kool but iam jst 13 was it okay for mah first free?????????? i will leave feed rite now mane!

TuNiT 10-17-04 08:29 AM

can i see wut challz opinnons on dis is please

.:Jack Rackam:. 10-17-04 08:49 AM

well at least you can ryhme...
its better then some i seen...
but intro is right..drop something
that aint like this n you'll get better feedback...

TuNiT 10-17-04 08:50 AM

thank you! honesty is appreciated wut shuld i drop doh??? diz wuz just a quick free i did


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