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Logic The Goonie 10-19-04 01:06 AM

What Happened?
 
There was love here before, how did it dissapeer?
Wonderin why you use that tone of voice, confused sittin here
I ask you a question, I get sarcasm or nothing at all
It just gets bigger and bigger like a rolling shitball
I want you to trust me, but the feeling aint mutual
Me coming back and you walking away has turned to the usual
It's useless this bickering, where have we gotten?
Relationship sour everything between us has gone rotten
The friends say its a phase and that it happens all the time
And youll be back to me again once I finish the rhyme
I'm just balancing on a dime, hoping to stay afloat
Balancing on the rhymes, hopin you read what I wrote
This aint the usual "Oh I hate life." that you think im bringing
This is real life feelings, and sadness what youre reading
But blah its time for homework, I could careless whether people read
All i hope is you payed attention, and can see what I see

Grammar Popo 10-19-04 02:57 PM

Very good flow.Vocab is decent. Good emotion.
Work a little on the vocab otherwise it is awesome.
Great work.

Key... 10-20-04 05:16 AM

Shit...

This aint the usual "Oh I hate life." that you think im bringing
This is real life feelings, and sadness what youre reading

^^this is amazin i am likin yo piece fam u elevated alot.


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