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Originally posted by BaByGeE894
I think I'm going crazy, like my soul is trying to rip through my flesh/
This thing I once called my life, has turned into another big mess/
My boyfriend is always gone, doesn't seem like he wants to be around me anymore/
And every opportunity is just another closed door/
Why do I try to do anything to better myself when no one wants to notice?/

These seem to be the lines that stuck out the most to me
Maybe cause i know what your talking about, but the way you express yourself in these 1st few beginng lines leads you into a very powerful body and end...that's how most your relationship poems are, thats what makes them most unique
from what i recall...This was another great piece...nice job.

-Epik

im feelin this 4 sho.felt da emotion put in

Why do I try to do anything to better myself when no one wants to notice?/
Sometimes I just pick up things, look at them and think "I should throw this"/

^^
fav lines.nice drop.~1~

I am sorry....and i love you.....thas all am going to say...

oh girl..once again you bloe my mind wit another one of ya drops...i felt that line bout be'n lower then soil deeply...i can relate...

i know all about feel'n useless...

well anyways...nice drop...look'n foward to ya next one

yo dat was really tight and i can relate to it. i was really feelin it. keep it up. one

nice piece...strong emotions...raw....very well depicted...keep yo head up...respect....